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Kielo
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0 posted 2002-10-05 12:43 PM



Small hands,
perfectly tapered
at the end of each finger.
Beautiful white nails
contrasting
against her dark skin,
like coffee
with cream stirred in.
They are kind hands,
gentle hands.
Soft
and comforting.
They wipe away my tears,
and take my hand,
plain in comparison.
They hold my head,
framing my face
and stroke my hair,
and as they wipe the tears from my eyes,
they wipe away my sorrows,
and I sink into dreams
knowing I am loved -
her hands tell me so.

I need to change my signature. :D

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Larry C
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1 posted 2002-10-05 12:46 PM


Kielo,
A wonderful picture painted in these words. Well done.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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2 posted 2002-10-05 12:49 PM


Hi, Kielo. I agree with Larry....I could almost see those hands that you described so well. Good work. Thanks.
Ethel..garysgirl

Munda
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3 posted 2002-10-05 06:29 AM


I really enjoyed your poem.
Sunshine
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4 posted 2002-10-05 06:32 AM



Kielo, you note that you need to change your signature, and that may be...but please, do not change your style of writing...this was a very pleasant read.  Thank you!

Kielo
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5 posted 2002-10-05 08:09 PM


Thank you! This poem is old, written by my old muse. I miss my old muse. My new one writes funny things... LOL Thanks again for all the kind comments!

Kielo

I need to change my signature. :D

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6 posted 2002-10-05 08:26 PM


Heh Kielo, a very tender poem.
enjoyed the read.

El riesgo vive siempre!

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7 posted 2002-10-05 08:48 PM


Kielo - This is a lovely, gentle poem. I am putting it directly into my library. Enjoyed this....thinking of my own mother's delicate, small hands, with a tear in my eye. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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8 posted 2002-10-05 08:48 PM


enjoyed
Kielo
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9 posted 2002-10-05 09:33 PM


*wipes tear* I'm glad you liked it.

Kielo

Crysania
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10 posted 2002-10-06 10:06 PM


Hey sis! *grins* Luv the poem......I can picture her hands rigth now. *imagines*
AniKay83
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11 posted 2002-10-06 11:12 PM


beautiful white nails
contrasting
against her dark skin
like coffee
with cream stirred in
=============================================
and as they wipe the tears from my eyes,
they wipe away my sorrows,
and I sink into dreams
knowing I am loved -
her hands tell me so.
=============================================
The first part I quoted is my favorite part. The way it's written is very endearing. It's touching, I love it.

The last part is wonderful, as well. It highlights the most beautiful of moments. The moments where no words dare be spoke, yet oh so much is said. Killer. There's no better word for it.

Thanx for sharing.
~Krissie

"No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved"
~Mignon McLaughlin~

Kielo
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12 posted 2002-10-07 01:01 AM


*grins* Sis! Thanks.

AniKay, thank you. I'm glad you liked it!

Kielo

I need to change my signature. :D

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