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Last Squeak of the Back Gate
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Last Squeak of the Back Gate |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(Hanky-Alert) Last Squeak of the Back Gate By: Noah Eaton 10/2/02 He used to sit there on the corner of the sandbox With his Fisher Price fire truck and Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle action figures With sandy ivory hair that seemed so seraphic to me He couldn't speak much yet, what was he thinking I could never be too sure Spring reverberated through the ocean of his eyes When I felt the seagulls hibernating I knew autumn had come He had no last words, just one last breath And when I heard that last squeak of the back gate I cried if he will ever come back around So I still cry thinking What will his mom do with his bottle now? And how will she cope every morning When she feels that heartache deep down? It's so lonely So lonely now... There's a beach ball lying in the dry creek Where he accidentley rolled into there one day His mom said he loved holding frogs in the palm of his hand And return them there gently when he was done with his play Sat out on a lawn chair under the crabapple tree Waiting to hear if he just may come back around His mom took down the swingset four days ago And when you see that empty sandbox It's a saddening sight to see... So I still cry thinking What will his mom do with his bottle now? And how will she cope every morning When she feels that heartache deep down? It's so lonely So lonely now... Even now I feel his ghost around me Just wanting some attention, for the world to see I've never gotten to know him that well at all But inside, he reminds me of me... And I still cry thinking What will his mom do with his bottle now? And how will she cope every morning When she feels that heartache deep down? It's so lonely So lonely now... And I still cry thinking What will his mom do with his bottle now? And how will she cope every morning When she feels that heartache deep down? It's so lonely So lonely now... Will he ever come back around Will he ever come back around Oh, will he ever come back around Oh, will he ever come back around... (This is based on an experience when I was a little boy and knew a four-year old boy who passed away swallowing a harmful object, who like me seemed very shy and needed a special friend who I wanted to be for him and whose loss deeply aches me still as he reminds me so much of me!  )"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-04-2002 09:48 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Noah...this is so very sad. (Thanks for the hanky-alert) The loss of a child has to be the most horrible thing for a parent to go through. You are so kind and caring sweet sidekick. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, Noah, this is so sad. My heart goes out to everyone who knew this little boy. You have such a good, tender, caring heart, Noah, and you are so good at putting your feelings into words. Thanks so much for sharing this with us. With Love From Ethel...garysgirl |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
In a lifetime, how special it is to see ourselves in another...young or old... A tribute of the highest kind Noah... shivered in me to read your words. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, Tears filled my eyes as I read your heartfelt words. I am sure this little boy is one of God's sweetest angels. hugs, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. [This message has been edited by Nightshade (10-04-2002 10:05 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Noah on this sad subject...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  but very sad  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. Very good write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Pure Heart is what I read and felt as tears want to buid in this fathers eyes hoping and praying that my sons out live me as it should always be in life. Noah this was beautiful I enjoyed so much. |
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mpt Junior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 32australia |
great writing amazing the way u make us seem to kno the child who was lost...Though dreams can be deceiving |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Now you must write an upbeat piece to offset this one |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*soft hugs* for you Noah, you've remembered him so beautifully... ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Noah Your words filled my heart with sorrow and I could almost feel your heart breaking as you remembered this tragic time. You have the kindest of hearts and abundance of love that you share with all of us and I, for one, am so very grateful for all you give. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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The Crimson Knight Member
since 2002-09-16
Posts 57Reno, NV |
You heart is as warm as your words well written enjoyed the read, I feel the pain in your words, cause it’s hard to lose friends I've lost a few along the way |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
This is so very sad. No pain runs deeper than the loss of a child. "The last squeak of the back gate." This is perfection, my friend. I'm sorry your story was inspired by true events, but you do it justice having been the one who told it. I have been missing from here for a long time, but I can always count on you to touch my heart. Thank you for sharing. ~Krissie "No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved" |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Oh, Noah.....tragically beautiful. *sigh* That lasting image, burning inside of me, of a lonely beach ball, buffeted back and forth on a deserted beach, bumping into objects, never going forward, seems to epitomize the child's leaving. The squeaky gate that squeaks no more.....nodding story telling at its best.... your friend, jeff |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
 hugsssss you Lauren~ I need some distraction |
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