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Hello Above.........Serenity's Challange

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Martie
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0 posted 10-03-2002 11:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

hello
above I think you are
or all around
that star

canít say that Iíve not looked away
a stray
but I used to be Sundayís child
licking that gold star beside my name in school
and every night I laid me down
my soul
what was that I didnít know
but didnít want to die before I woke
forsaken..no no

I asked you to help me back then when I was ten
with something bigger then I have known since
put my hands out into the dark
in my room with the closet I feared and asked
just needed to know what to do

and while Iím at the questioning
Iíve been wondering about that angel
I called Michelle
you know she was special she was
most for me a first big love
and my prayer was big that day
I know Iíd faltered earlier and now I was in need
all of a sudden I asked
..is that greed

to take a child who was loved so dear
this tear is all you gave to me in answer
and still I ask
how is this plan worked out

I donít mean any disrespect
and Iím sure you know my heart is good
believes in love and brotherhood

and I appreciate all the little things you made
for me to touch
and I know one day beyond this time
sense will make of me some semblance
of what this time spent is meant to be

until then just one thing for peace on earth
goodwill to men
could we get some help with this

amen

[This message has been edited by Martie (10-03-2002 11:56 PM).]

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Martie,
I'm at a loss for words, to try and explain how touching this is (((hugs)))for you
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2 posted 10-03-2002 11:59 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"I donít mean any disrespect
and Iím sure you know my heart is good
believes in love and brotherhood
and doing onto others good

and I appreciate all the little things you made
for me to touch
and I know one day beyond this time
sense will make of me some semblance
of what the time spent was meant to be"




(big hugggssssss) Oh Martie, this is soooo wonderfully heartfelt, sweet friend, I know with all my heart that your Michelle is safe in His embrace just as He holds the answers to man and He does have a plan that the only thing more we need is man's heart to listen and cooperate which only time can help establish, which then these circles of goodwill will spread! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a fabulous challenge response, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 10-04-2002 12:05 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Think you worked a bit of Job into this Jeremiah.  The questioning here and this challenge, in general, seem to be stalking me tonight...lol.  Is making me think.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (10-04-2002 12:07 AM).]

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my
my my
my mmmarvelous mmmartie?
(I swear there is something French in me that makes me type: "marite")

yes...you took this to the depths and beyond. Book of Job? Indeed.
Jeremiad?
I'll work pro-bono on your defense.

What a gracious spirit, and generous, with your willing heart.

Thank you.
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Most special...
   the poet
       the challenge
           the questions
               most special

the answer that will come, one day...
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Martie - sweet poetess, this has touched me deeply. hugs to you, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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My friend... the questions are ones certainly begging an answer...and ones you and I both know we'll have to wait to fully understand..
very skillfully written.. very touching..

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Martie,
Your writing always lifts the mist and shows the horizon.
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Martie, this has such a ring of truth that I could hear you saying the words. Well done!
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martie.......wow, don't know what I could say that hasn't been said......wonderful touching write....course everything you write is...sigh..
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rereading only brings more tears.....the honesty reaches the heart of me
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to take a child who was loved so dear
this tear is all you gave to me in answer
and still I ask
how is this plan worked out

I don't mean any disrespect
and I'm sure you know my heart is good
believes in love and brotherhood


and I appreciate all the little things you made
for me to touch
and I know one day beyond this time
sense will make of me some semblance
of what this time spent is meant to be


until then just one thing for peace on earth
goodwill to men
could we get some help with this

=====================================


Isnt just like you to ask for all of humanity and add in self humilty while asking the hearts hardest questions of why.
The challenge was to "pitch a fit" ...
you penned a prayer of pure poetry...I bet its gets heard first

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canít say that Iíve not looked away
a stray
but I used to be Sundayís child
licking that gold star beside my name in school
and every night I laid me down
my soul
what was that I didnít know
but didnít want to die before I woke
forsaken..no no

Something about this verse just really speaks, that is not say that wole poem doesn't, it does and then some.
Martie, these are powerful words, wonderfully written.


El riesgo vive siempre!

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Touching is an understatement our Cali Girl..

You wrote your heart into this poem...
I can see that very easily from all
which is within this....

Beautifully done dear one...
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Thank you for your replies to this...

I think when you're talking to God, it's best to write the truth and make it from the heart...and that's what I tried to do.  

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Came back for another read...
still feeling the heart-tugs...
still...knowing why the why is questioned...
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oh, how utterly touching; lump in my throat and tears in my eyes.........
..................................

without surrender, be on good terms with all persons...

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Martie - I believe the spirit of love you approach has the same questions you ask - so often we reach out for answers only to find a tear, pain, aches and loss which the love spirit is feeling tha pain and crying too - Job and JEremiah have nothing that approaches the searching soul you share with us - lovely - Paul
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Hi Martie a beautifully met challenge sweet lady. I absolutely loved it.

Maree
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Hello, Martie. There's no way that I could say any more than your other family of friends has already said. I only know that you did a very sincere job of pouring your heart out to God in this poem (prayer). Though none of us could even begin to try to explain the reason "why", I do feel that one day the answer will be known to you. The word of God says that our minds could not even comphehend if we knew all the mysteries of Him. I hope you feel all the love that's poured out to you from all your "family of friends". My heart goes out to you.
Love,
Ethel
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No cries are quite as fervent as those of and for a child.  This is beautiful.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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