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Snake Charmer ... Iambe Family Challenge

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 10-02-2002 04:28 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

heres the link to Captains challenge request:
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum7/HTML/000505.html

~~~~~~~~~~~~
thank you Ron...for the inspiration ...
most of all for your Iambe series...and the way it makes this moth feel...no one writes her like you.

~~~~~~~~~


Snake Charmer


I'll never forget the first
time I laid eyes on Jake,
Iambe and Dillion's older brother.

He blew in unexpectedly
on a sultry summers breeze.
Tanned and tattooed ...
cowboy hat, blue jeans and boots.
He gave off an intensity like a
Texas tire fire.

He rarely wore more than jeans,
that tan and those tattoos.
He broke in his Levis like he did
the broncs and the women.

He never left the rodeo without the prize ...
never left the bar without skinned knuckles
and the girl on his arm.

He was one of the few men I'd ever seen
who could look Iambe in the eye and see
respect returned.

I'll never forget the last time I saw Jake either.
Iambe and I walked up on him swimming in
the lake, nothing on but that tan.

He just stood, strolled up the bank to his clothes,
smiling like the rattlesnake tattoo on his backside.
He pulled on his boots and jeans, tipped his hat,
winked at us and sauntered on down the dirt road.

As I watched him walk away ...
I remember wishing with a vengeance
to be a tattoo in my next life.

© Copyright 2002 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-02-2002 04:31 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

about time you got this posted over here!!!
(chuckling)

Like your take on Iambe's relatives! Good stuff JM... now can you write him again? Can you build him into his own as a character that you can use? I bet you can!

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2 posted 10-02-2002 04:32 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Sheesh, Ron's like Mr. Rogers. LOL

Loved this, JM.
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What an interesting family...we've got Iambe, Dillon, Jake and Konrad...do you think...

never mind...

you already did...
Janet Marie
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4 posted 10-02-2002 04:37 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Thanks Ron...
I was hesitant to post this as I have been gone for a couple weeks and havent been able to do many replies...I'm so far behind in here, but I couldnt resist the chance to try and pay tribute to your series that so many of us have come to enjoy so much.

As for Jake being a muse....
well what moth can resist a cowboy
thanks Capt.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 10-02-2002 04:39 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

thanks Mike..cant wait to see your character
thanks K...now you can call off the dogs LOL
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Ron...if she can't 'use' him, I sure can! LOL.

Janet Marie~
I'm loving this from you.
Love the picture you've painted in words, and
gotta love the tan and jeans.
Got me chuckling at the thought of being a tattoo
in your next life.  You'd be one HAPPY tattoo! LOL.
Thanks for sharing this one, poet friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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7 posted 10-02-2002 04:48 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I love this...Tattoo in your next life? LOL So cute!

I'd like to read more about him too..
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8 posted 10-02-2002 04:52 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

JM~Now this is one relative I would love to meet!  
WOOHOOO!  Oh yes....this is great!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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Janet Marie

I love the way you painted this older brother.  I wonder how many children will end up in this family?  Really good to see you here in open!!
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10 posted 10-02-2002 07:00 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"He gave off an intensity like a
Texas tire fire."

"He broke in his Levis like he did
the broncs and the women."

"As I watched him walk away ...
I remember wishing with a vengeance
to be a tattoo in my next life."

Yeeeeehawwwwwww!  I see Ron tickled your muse with inspiration Janet Marie!  What a wonderful read ... you had me smiling from the get go, gator gal.  I absolutely love those lines above, and what a great ending. You need to write more like this, yes indeedy, you do, you do!  Much enjoyed JM ... wonderful to read you.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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hmm yes I agree with Poet deVine..a tattoo in your next life..loved it..pure magic and gold and hehe even better chocolate haha sorry have a thing for chocolate

Consider yourself fuzzed

[This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-02-2002 07:04 PM).]

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12 posted 10-02-2002 07:43 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

JM,
Have no idea what this is about, but you did a great job. Made me a little jealous. LOL
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WOW Jan, this is different of poetry for you.
I can see that the ocean air agreed with your muse.

"He gave off an intensity like a
Texas tire fire.

He broke in his Levis like he did
the broncs and the women."

"He never left the rodeo without the prize ...
never left the bar without skinned knuckles
and the girl on his arm.


and the last line, a classic
"As I watched him walk away ...
I remember wishing with a vengeance
to be a tattoo in my next life.

This is fantastic Eve-a-gator. Keep writing free verse. THis one's a keeper.

El riesgo vive siempre!

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awesome!

SS


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(smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, you should post here more often, I just love it when you drop in and suprise us wih your beautiful words! (kiss on cheek) The family grows on and so do your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Well, I'll be...look what the tide brought in!  I'm impressed, Jams.  Ya did the challenge justice and then some.  And free verse, too!!  Amazing what a bit of sea spray will do.
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thought I was reading about myself. Only I smell like a tire fire. This one put a smile on my face, thanks for sharing. I will have to check out the link.  

Tom
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18 posted 10-02-2002 11:05 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Hey guys...Ive got storms going on here, but I wanted to thank everyone for these very cool and generous replies...
I enjoyed writing for this challenge...
I hope some of you who havent discovered this "Iambe" series of Rons will check out the Archives and enjoy them as much as I have...and hopefully some of you will give this challenge a try...

DUNCAN...that means you


Sybabers...dont be jealous...its all fiction, LOL...and besides...Randy looks mighty fine in his cowboy hat


thank you to ALL for your kind replies and support. "Life" has taken me away from here for awhile...Im still playing catch up and trying to get grounded again.
my love and respect to Poetry Land
jm

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whew...seen a few tattoos like that myself
ahem.....this is fantastic Janet. Have sooooo missed reading you!!
Janet Marie
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20 posted 10-03-2002 06:57 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

LOL....thank you Susan ...
I just had a feeling you would like this one Sea-girlie


thanks to all
love, jm
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Janet baby, you moth you.
Got a big smile out of this great write.
Gee I always wanted a tattoo of a butterfly or a moth...

Parker
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This is WONDERFUL---but then--grinning--rumor has it I've got this "thing" for snakes! (methinks I am calm enough to read now...) See? Your muse is not gone luvie, just needed the right inspiration!

Janet Marie
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23 posted 10-04-2002 12:19 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

P-man....hey sweet tease...so good to see your name here...and if I put a smile on that darlin face of yours then I must be doing something right
So....just where is it youd like that tattoo..the left or right ???
Coming or going?

KA...well you know theres nothing like a tanned cowboy to get a moth riled up ...
been watching the news and holding you and yours in thought.
love ya me twin...stay high and dry  
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awwww... you'd make such a cute tattoo too! (tattoo too - wow, that's an odd pairing...) hey - uhm, i, uh... noticed something about this poem... struck me right off, and stuck with me straight through... IT DOESN'T RHYME!!! (insert evil, repetitive laughter here).

likes it mothy you... the end line is wonderful, packing a punch and sticking to the skin (ok, pun intended) like a last line should.

hugs
 
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