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Winter Rain in F

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 10-02-2002 02:53 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

Shhh.
Ti ti ti.
Now flow.
(keep heart's warmth)
Flow.
(warm blood's calm)
Flow.

Ripple, slow wind.
Whisper, long rain.
Build the tempest slow,
step by step,
purple notes.

Trill among the clouds;
arpeggio now tumble down.
Soft gray stones
in growing eyes,
stripping hands of thunder.

Oh, stretch the rumble down,
bring it through the dark bass clouds.
Swell on through the rain (top hand)
and clap them both to lightning's end.

Petal break;
sharpen chords;
Hands in rove;
Stuttered stoke.

Stretch the rumble out to smoke.
Ringing dissonance.

Now bring a broken melody.
Break the clouds in poetry.
Slow the strength.
fingers' seat.
Slow the strength.

Soften length.

Trees across the plain.
Etch their ache within sustain.
Grasses blowing, softly there.
Lift descent.
Flow her there.

(Re...
re...
re...)

Now flow.
(calm blood's heat)
Flow.
(heat sure breath)
Flow.
(breath's own pace)

Shhh.
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1 posted 10-02-2002 03:03 PM       View Profile for Moonlight Romeo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moonlight Romeo

I have always heard Winter Rain in d-flat.  Just goes to show you that music is never heard the same way.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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Petal break;
sharpen chords;
Hands in rove;
Stuttered stoke.

Stretch the rumble out to smoke.
Ringing dissonance.

Now bring a broken melody.
Break the clouds in poetry.
Slow the strength.
fingers' seat.
Slow the strength.

Soften length.

Trees across the plain.
Etch their ache within sustain.
Grasses blowing, softly there.
Lift descent.
Flow her there.
================================
shhhhh .... listen ...
Im whispering into the wind...

"Your rhymes soothe me mothy soul"
"thank you for that my soulful squirrel"
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Hmm, I thought it was in D-flat, but then realized I had a 45 RPM set at 33 1/3.

Thanks, M.R.
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4 posted 10-02-2002 03:07 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I'm glad you enjoyed this, Butterfly Slippers! I just wanted to mess around with stresses and meter, and, frankly, wish I had a piano at the office.
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5 posted 10-02-2002 03:11 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

"Ripple, slow wind.
Whisper, long rain.
Build the tempest slow,
step by step,
purple notes."

oh I do love this Mike
( I am supposed to have rain on Friday)
this goes to my library
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6 posted 10-02-2002 03:56 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

yeah....youplayed this tune well and I can almost hear it tinkling out as notes are dropped...repeated...lost to the next..

enjoyed this a great deal my friend..
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This one MUST be read aloud!
and Mike?  Congrats on 6,000 posts!
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SEA, Thank you. Send the rain this way!

Ron, Ah, perhaps my poem helped inspire your Showered in Silent Words? If not, I will pretend it did anyway, and feel honored that my words could inspire yours, or, at the very least, fire your mind a bit.

Sun, oh, I definitely intend to read this aloud. And thanks for the well wishes and congratulations!
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Mike

Feels like rain tonight...the sound of your poem is in the room..rhythm touched am I.
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10 posted 10-02-2002 11:24 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Mikey...it's raining here tonight and
this is just beautiful....
Also congratulations.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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11 posted 10-03-2002 01:32 AM       View Profile for Anvrill   Email Anvrill   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Anvrill's Home Page   View IP for Anvrill

*melt*

.....

I don't know what it is about poems starting with "shh," but......

*melt s'more*

beautiful, baby. beautiful baby.

your tongue's like poison
so swollen it fills up my mouth

rs

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Ripple, slow wind.
Whisper, long rain.


I'm hushed

love the flow to this ~ it reads beautifully

Sammie
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what wonderful performance poetry this would be and how very fresh and original - I enjoyed it very very much!
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Martie, thank you. I worked on this one a bit to get the rhythm (and the melody) into the words as best I could...

Nancy, thank you for your kind words and your congratulations.

I love you, babygrrl. Glad y' enjoyed. *kiss*

Thanks, Sammie. The hush before the storm?

I'm glad you enjoyed this, Bekki. It would make even better performance poetry if I had a piano with it.
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a concert for one--

You have captured the peace of a musician's heart--that place of unthinking concentration--um..Zen....

om mani padme ohm...



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16 posted 10-03-2002 04:39 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Zen,
you understand musicians well.

Hmm, I sometimes wondered
why I always called you Sen
instead of Ser.

(at least I don't do Se'n anymore)
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(smiles) This is beautiful, sweet friend, I love to walk out in the freezing rain (as long as it is not hailing of course) as it is so comforting and I feel great tranquility doing so! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderfully composed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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damn I miss reading you.
 
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