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The Smell of Wet Cement
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The Smell of Wet Cement |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Smell of Wet Cement The fog is laying down on the mountain. It weaves a gauze dressing over the naked burn of trees, a breath of frore from some patient star to hide the clearing where the prints of deer still run. My bare foot is guided to the morning spirit that fills me like new rain, and moisture laden, the clumped air culls memory of a hose in the dry backyard of a city with hard streets. Just to breathe this change of time is enough to measure how the leaf will turn and fall in color like flame licking summer grass into piles of cracked sound, and somewhere out an open door, as persistent as the sunrise, will be the smell of wet cement. [This message has been edited by Martie (09-28-2002 07:39 PM).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You made me look  My dictionary didn't have "frore" so I had to go to dictionary.com. There you go again, increasing my vocab.  This was such an excellent, vivid piece. Love the "and fall in color like flame licking summer grass into piles of cracked sound," audio/video pic here, FANTABULOUS! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As always, vivid, charming and presented in full dress color! Enjoyed. ThisDiamond |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Girl....you are just tooo good at this visual poetry that you grace our mind's eye with... I always love your writings.. They are priceless gifts... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - another stirring write, as you always do... BC |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is excellent Martie, the imagery is fantastic, loved every single line m'dear. Enjoyed. Maree |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Martie, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your wonderful words always stir precious colors and leaves around, this is breathtaking, I could smell it all too reading this, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, may I have the honor of standing in the line of your admirers? I really enjoy the experience of reading the fruits of your poetic talent and this peach was no exception. Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie..Martie..Martie!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie~You brought a tear to my eye with this one...Paul I know you can't wait for the rainy season to begin out there, to bring some relief from the fires in your lovely state. I bet when it rains you just throw off your shoes and walk in the rain and smell the steam rising from wet concrete. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie, I know you're in Cali - I'm not sure exactly where, but I was sad to read in another one of your recent poems that fire has claimed the earth around you. I'm also thankful that it sounds as though it didn't take your home away, though. I love the sense of hope in this poem. After - what has it been - six months since the last rain, it will sure be a welcomed sight, followed by Californians sliding into each other on the oil-slicked freeways, right? Peace to you - Corinne |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
your poetry just captures a person and weaves magic and smells and images around them and I love it - Paul |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
martie, as always a vivid and powerful write. Don't drag the orchestra into this thing Rattle those sticks, rattle those sticks The sound is beautiful, its perfect! The birthday party [This message has been edited by brian madden (09-30-2002 07:31 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ya know Martie, I just love reading your stuff cuz I know I am going to smile and say dang she is soooooo good. Well done hon! If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's all been said but I wanted to drop in to say I read...I like this one |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Martie, I enjoyed this so much and your words always paint a brilliant picture for me. I do hope the fires have been held back; I have not seen any TV news reports of it lately. Frore, I had to look it up and I thank you for adding a new word to my vocabulary. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This one... goes in your book! |
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