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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-09-28 09:48 AM


She took pity on me
More a pardon, really
as she knew
that I couldn’t dance
but would,
if pressed

So, she deigned to dance
with a pink young man
wearing too new jeans
over too new boots
once he’d worked himself up
enough,
to ask

And as I watched her bare feet
trace patterns
on that old wood floor
I rued the fact
that the simple glide
of that jukebox two-step

Had one more step
than I could manage  

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

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brian sites
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1 posted 2002-09-28 11:07 AM


nice
Ed,
just,
perfect

the quintessential wranx

mmm
b

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2002-09-28 12:02 PM


Nicely penned! Don't forget, my name is on that dance card, and it's ok to do the slow-standing-in-one-spot dance.
bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-09-28 01:07 PM


Sheesh, wranx. You attract the ladies even with a skip 'n' stumble.
I like your interpretation of Iambe.
Thanks again for reading my sad rendition of same.

Hope Ron likes 'em!

(keep writin'!)

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-09-28 04:07 PM


*beaming at you*

She does seem to bring out some very interesting aspects of self--doesn't she?

I'm sure Ron is loving this--I know that I am...

So glad that you posted this--you have the voice of understanding deserving of her.

*snaps* to ya, Ed.

Tiersdin
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5 posted 2002-09-28 07:02 PM


Ed, Ron is going to love this. I know that I did!

*smiles*
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2002-09-30 08:25 AM


(smiling) Ed you have done her proud my friend... between you and Mike, both have cpatured the bewildering state of mind she leaves you in and how you wish you could be just a bit more...or perhaps understand a bit more... what it is that leaves you wanting to be.

I always enoy anothers perspective on Iambe...and as I have explained she is not totally my creation and has been passed from poet to poet for some time, usually a lot quicker than her extended stay with me. Seems when she landed on my doorstep, she had worn out her welcome with too many others and it is noce to see she has found such welcome in the words of Mike and You.

Perhaps there is a challenge in here...I think I'll drop it on the challenge board and see if you two are interested...

again...I enjoyed and thanks for sharing your words and view of Iambe.


Sunshine
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7 posted 2002-09-30 10:49 AM



You guys are doing very well with Iambe...every now and then a female poet steps in and takes her to new places...you will have to visit the archives to see how Iambe gets around!

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