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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-09-28 03:35 AM

You blink

and the sky closes

  the angels swim
in a blue lake
    lit from beneath

   the blaze casting their shadows
on the clouds

              they splash
in the divine
ecstatic
at being
within
      the gaze of You
                     (are that You are)

I am
a speck of dust
and You

       call me

                   Angel

[This message has been edited by brian sites (09-28-2002 03:37 AM).]

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2002-09-28 10:10 AM

Hmm...not like the usual angel poems I read. I like this, and I'm trying to figure out why it doesn't have any replies.

*sigh*
Such is the fate of good poetry here sometimes.

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

2 posted 2002-09-28 10:33 AM

yeah , this is great! very cool images as well

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-09-28 12:35 PM

Brian,
This reminds me of my favorite,
saddest
Radiohead song.
It's called Pyramid Song.
Here's how it goes.

Jumped in the river
what did I see?
Black-eyed angels swam at me.
In a room full of stars
and astral cars.
All my friends I used to see.
All my lovers
were there with me.
All my past and future.
Went to heaven
in a little row boat.
There's nothing to fear,
nothing to doubt.

Thanks for capturing that
with your poem!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2002-09-28 12:37 PM

Divinity is a tasty candy.
Oops, wrong divinity.
Tasty poem though.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-09-28 03:26 PM

I love this--this is YOU--still and quiet--a hushed whisper write, Brian--mind if I print this one and carry it around with me awhile? (like the rest of my life?)

and laughing at the midnitesun (hmmm...now THERE'S a line...) but YES, Divinity IS a tasty candy!

smiles and sighs.

You have earned your wings, Bri...

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

6 posted 2002-09-28 03:39 PM

I don't know how I missed this one!! It's a wonderful write!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

7 posted 2002-09-28 03:58 PM

Imagery, imagery, imagery.

and more.

(was gonna parody this, ending with

I am
a dust bunny
and you

call me

frog

but thought better of it)

Really fine write, m'friend

~Ed

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2002-09-29 01:38 AM

came back? to smile at Ed...dust bunny frogs eh?

and since I'm here....might as well splash around a bit!

The water is fine...

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