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Helen My Helen
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Helen My Helen |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
My Helen! Yar a hellavawoman my Helen! Yar hips are mountains yar rump's the same my Helen! Yar two breasts lovely Yar ten toes beauties Helen! I love ya Helen my Helen! Ya hear? I love ya Helen my Helen! Will ya make my dinner now my Helen? Willya make me my dinner today? |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ROFLMAO...this isn't for me but...i can not resist...no but you can make mine!!!! giggle |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
LOL! That was absolutely hilarious!  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Mount Helen?..... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A poem rivalled only by Yeat's "no second troy." Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
LMAO!!! Nice one Radrook!! Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Thanks all for the feedback. Actually, I was not thinking of Mount St. Helens. Well, at least not on a conscious level. The repetition of the name Helen serves the purpose of indicating that the man might be drunk. It also is intended to hint at his limited imagination since he has to fill in the silence to think of something new to say. But all he can come up with is the same annoying chant possibly heard a million times by his SEEMINGLY "victim" wife. BTW The "hell" sound in "Helen" is supposed to indicate the woman's role in perhaps causing this man to become what he is. |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
brian madden Member Elite since 05-06-2000 Posts 4170 anywhere but here Newsletter Staff 4 posted 09-27-2002 02:26 PM -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A poem rivalled only by Yeat's "no second troy." Response: In view of the vast difference in styles between these two poems your unsolicited remark comes accross as sarcastic irony. You are comparing grapes with tomatoes and bananas with peas. There is not just ONE set way to say things--fortunately. I can write like Yeats when and if I choose to. In fact, I have written hundreds of poem in that high-flown style. This time, however, I chose to try something completely different and thought that most readers would be perceptive enough to see that. Actually, and fortunately, most were. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Radrook, on one level I was being sarcastic, though no ill intent was meant. I was merely joking, a what in my mind was a harmless remark. I apologise if any offence was caused, as it was not my intent. I do not dispute your talent. To clarify my response, I made a comparison to Yeat's "no second troy” because even though both poems have different styles, their themes are similar, unrequited love that seems doomed. I apologise if my remarks came across as sneering. I have a rather sarcastic sense of humour. I often forget how badly irony and sarcasm misinterpreted in print. Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood |
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