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Xeonox
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0 posted 2002-09-25 01:56 AM


Frustrated,
Feeling raped,
Everything taken,
Raked away…

Life is no more,
A slave to goals,
To others,
And to wants,
The wishes-
Left unfed…

Killers of night,
Haunt as I sleep,
A kilt of fiction,
Bind me as I shiver,
In the blood river…

My mocking shadow,
Seeks other,
To hide behind,
For the coward in me
Has died…

Mind races,
To a stop!
Brimless space,
Keeping with the pace,
Analyze this case…

Clues left dormant,
No connection made,
Remove your shade,
Ha-
Human made…

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

© Copyright 2002 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
Krishankins
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1 posted 2002-09-25 03:32 AM


Very interesting write! A lot of action, and some sarcastic anger is felt in these lines. Nice job!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2002-09-25 01:35 PM


You are just spilling all or your thoughts and feelings right out there. Very effectively laid out.

A very raw and potent write.
EA

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2002-09-25 01:42 PM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

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