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ShadowRider
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0 posted 2002-09-23 06:19 PM






Watcher of the Woods

Too long in winter's exile
with extended arctic exhale
Fall danced in the meanwhile
biding time lurking in dales

I smeared my footprints on her doorstep
crunching the gold leaf underfoot
floor of woods like a bedroom unkempt
tripping now over a covered root

He sat in the loftiest of trees
sneering that rodents can't fly
Missing nothing, a moment to seize
an air ship royal in a moonlit sky

Night black - a torch before him
like a coffin wants for a nail
Heard him before I saw him
with his wounded witches wail

In an instant the woods were mute
In a flash, he descended upon prey
He fits with ease in midnight's boot
uneasy in the light of day

Swallowing with zest his nightly meal
Returning to his lookout perch
Every possible ray of night he feels
Eyes wise and solemn like a church

I wondered, if he was as large as I
As tall and proud, for what it's worth
If he could reason, walk and cry
Who would win dominion of the earth?


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1 posted 2002-09-23 06:34 PM


ShadowRider~
This is just wonderful~

How like the wise owl would we all be ...
if we had his vision ?
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2002-09-23 06:41 PM




(smiles) Wow!!! Ooohhhhh...I love this, sweet friend, I quite envy the enlightenment and the stillness owls have with them, and I believe if we could all sit atop that peaceful aerie like the owl we can all find the ulimate blessing of life! (big hugggsssss) There is so much we can learn from all our siblings of God, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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3 posted 2002-09-23 06:43 PM


As I have said before, as an amatuer, I doubt anyone would care for my opinion. However, I really liked your poem. SO often I have caught glimpes of owls and had visions of their wisdom and moonlit gaze. ;D
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4 posted 2002-09-23 06:46 PM


This is really a good write. The Owl, such a wise creature from God.
Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-09-23 07:18 PM


Jeff...your writing is amazing...
Your imagery so incedible!
All I can manage to do is sit here and shake my head.
How do you do this?
Fantastic!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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6 posted 2002-09-23 07:19 PM


Swallowing with zest his nightly meal
Returning to his lookout perch
Every possible ray of night he feels
Eyes wise and solemn like a church


A beautiful poem.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

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7 posted 2002-09-24 02:30 AM


I wondered, if he was as large as I
As tall and proud, for what it's worth
If he could reason, walk and cry

I love how you depict your own wisdom Jeff~
Your poetry is so often larger than life and runs deep into the heart of the matter~
I tend to think that a person who does not cry is without a soul~ Just like we're blessed with happiness to share we're also blessed with tears when we fall from our perch.  

Smiling at you, as always~  

Paddy
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8 posted 2002-09-24 11:06 AM


I enjoyed this immensely. Thanks for the read.

I guess one becomes content with one’s poetry when one opens the book ten years hence and does NOT exclaim, “Did I really write this?”

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9 posted 2002-09-24 11:22 AM


..."wounded witch's wail"---wonderful!!!

I truly enjoyed this piece Jeff!

~ May you your day be a hoot and a half! ~

Linda


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10 posted 2002-09-24 05:05 PM


This is a gorgeous write, Jeff...
I especially loved the last verse...the personification of the owl
~ hugs from my underground burrow

Lyra

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11 posted 2002-09-24 05:31 PM


Jeff

I was walking with you in this one...and felt the wonder of your view of this awesome creature.  Again, you write so well!

ShadowRider
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12 posted 2002-09-24 11:56 PM


Thank you all, very very much for your comments and replies.  Each of you continue to be an inspiration and aspiration for me to achieve.  For once, i was half way happy with the way the poem turned out.  (I am soooo picky about stuff).  Writing about animals is something i love to do, as Lyra says, personifying them, but it's extremely difficult to do without being repetitious or simply to get into their mind and way of thinking.  

Be well, and think of others
first
Jeff

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13 posted 2002-09-25 04:14 AM


Well personifying you did, and you did it extremely well.  Your effort on this poem are noticeable as the cadence is wonderful.  Just a great poem, and I kept this one to read again, (loved the picture too) completed the whole presentation.

God Bless
    
Sharon  

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