Reflections (short love poem)

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Reflections (short love poem)

haydenjames
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since 2002-02-14

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Antigua & Barbuda

0 posted 2002-09-23 02:48 AM

Reflections

Tranquil day of motionless wonderings
Thoughts disturbing the bustling of quiet
As the focus of my whole bliss is remembered… you.

Cognizant of the close propinquity of your beloved soul
Just minutes away… does not satisfy my covet
As daydream of what is… was… to be felt are rapt… your love

Surface… at this moment… soon my love… for all eternity…

... hope you like it..

My poetry is at: http://www.thehayden.org

Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2002-09-23 07:32 AM

And I do like it HaydenJames ... this has a lovely whispered flow throughout the lines. Very nicely captured.

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (09-23-2002 07:32 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-09-23 07:43 AM

haydenjames
Nice, enjoyed the read.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

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Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-09-23 10:07 AM

I like it.

Good write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

4 posted 2002-09-23 04:34 PM

...and I'm sure she will!--I know I did!

~ smiles ~
EA

Irie
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since 1999-12-01

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Washington State

5 posted 2002-09-23 04:55 PM

quote:
Just minutes away… does not satisfy my covet

This says it all!

Enjoyed Hayden

~Sheri

"Don't wait for your ship to come in ...
Swim out to it"

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

6 posted 2002-09-23 05:04 PM

I agree with Kit, nice flow. Whispers in the lines.

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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