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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

0 posted 2002-09-22 11:59 PM

My Dad's a man who's to the point,
He doesn't mince his words,
Senseless prattle wastes his time
And gossip's for the birds!

He claims that I do ramble on,
In a mindless chatter,
That I should think, before I speak,
And say what really matters!

When voicing his opinions,
People note what he does say,
They know he'll make, each statement count,
And not go on all day!

Perhaps he's right, for I have found,
That I am seldom heard,
Oft' times I must repeat myself,
A second or a third!

It can be disconcerting,
To find myself ignored,
For people often tune me out
Because they're getting bored!

When in a conversation,
And there comes a sudden lull,
I go and fill that silence
With anything at all!

I guess I really should take stock
Of that which I do utter,
I shouldn't talk to hear myself,
Since I've been known to mutter.

So, now I think, before I speak,
And follow Dad's advice,
"Say what you mean; mean what you say,
And always be concise!

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-09-23 12:03 PM

Wonderful write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Fuji
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since 2002-09-23

Posts 26

2 posted 2002-09-23 04:16 AM

I absolutely loved it.
I feel much the same way about myself and
my dad. He's given me the same advise.
Your poem carried a nice rhythm.

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2002-09-23 07:06 AM

Oh, I absolutely loved this Earth Angel! Wise, wise words indeed, all wrapped up in a wonderfully rythmic and flowing tale. Very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

4 posted 2002-09-23 08:50 AM

From one rambler to another, your Dad's advice is right on....

Good writing, good advice. (I'm trying to be concise!!)

Hugs, Marti

Every now and then take a good look at something not made
with hands -- a mountain, a star, the power of the ocean.
There will come to you wisdom,

Earth Angel
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Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2002-09-23 09:01 AM

Julie---

I suppose your hands are quite cold right now, because that was a warm response from your heart!

~ have a great day! ~

EA

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2002-09-23 09:07 AM

Fuji---

Hello! I see you are new to PIP--welcome!

Thank you for your kind reply. I sometimes do, still ramble on though--in my replies! hehe

~ smiles across the miles ~

Earth Angel

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2002-09-23 09:12 AM

Kit---

Your enthusiastic and very complimentary reply has me grinning from ear to ear---It's a great way for me to start my day! Thanx!

~ May you make many pleasant memories this fine fall day ~

Linda

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2002-09-23 09:16 AM

Marti---

hahaha! --that was funny!

  The sun is up
  It's a brand new day
  So make it a good one
  In every way!

~ a good morning hug to you! ~

Linda

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

9 posted 2002-09-23 09:40 AM

very well written and wise too ...

regards
sudhir

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2002-09-23 09:42 AM

(smiles) Oh Linda, this is so very true, sweet friend, my dad tells me the same thing because I have a tendency to be descriptive when I talk and have him think "Will this anecdote ever end?" LOL! This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Linda, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

11 posted 2002-09-23 09:52 AM

Sudhir---

Yes, my Dad is a wise man, and I have tried to be wise as well by following his words of wisdom---unfortunately, I am not always that successful! hehe

~ smiles across the miles ~

EA

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2002-09-23 09:58 AM

Noah--

Good morning!---although, I'm sure you are probably still sleeping out there in Colorado!

Thank you for your warm reply!

~ When you get up, sweet prince---may your day be full of good thoughts and good deeds!
--but of course it will, 'cause you're and angel! ~

Linda

Paddy
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since 2002-09-23

Posts 52
Straya

13 posted 2002-09-23 03:13 PM

If your dad is right
This poetry you would not write
Then where would we be
Enriched the less

I guess one becomes content with one’s poetry when one opens the book ten years hence and does NOT exclaim, “Did I really write this?”

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

14 posted 2002-09-23 03:24 PM

Paddy--

I loved your poetic reply! tehe If I took the literal meaning of all that my Dad has said to me, I'd be a bit strung out and paranoid! I always listened to his pearls of wisdom, while I was growing up, and I internalized and integrated into my being that which I felt was right for me. I do try to think before I speak--or write! But as you can see from this rambling reply---I ain't perfect!

~ Enjoy your new PIP family! ~

Earth Angel

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

15 posted 2002-09-23 03:42 PM

When in a conversation,
And there comes a sudden lull,
I go and fill that silence
With anything at all!

Linda - So do I !! My husband just looks at me and shakes his head. lol. I really enjoyed this poem. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

16 posted 2002-09-23 03:50 PM

Chris---

You do that too? Ha Ha! I just can't stand it when there's a lull in a conversation and everyone just stares at each other in a very uncomfortable silence---I still find myself junping in---but instead of just blurting out anything, I do try to think before I speak---well, at least most of the time! hehe

~ Have a super duper day! ~
Linda

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

17 posted 2002-09-23 05:57 PM

Ha ha ha ha! I love that it took you eight stanzas to come to rounding up the reason and point vis a vis the element of your father's advice to you at being non-longwinded, aka concise.

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

18 posted 2002-09-23 05:58 PM

This is truly one of your best gal!!!

Earth Angel
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Posts 40215
Realms of Light

19 posted 2002-09-23 07:54 PM

Mike---

Hahahahahaha! That's funny! I guess I still haven't grasped the concept of being concise!----I'm just as long-winded as ever!

~ I hope you have a lovely evening, and a lovely life, and everything goes well for you, and that your pen never dries up on you, and that you experience financial abundance and vibrant good health, and that your dog never has fleas, and that you don't lose your hair---or your sense of humor!....
.........................................................................etc. etc. etc.

~ smiles ~
Linda

Earth Angel
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20 posted 2002-09-23 07:57 PM

Toe---

Thank you for your resounding approval! Glad you enjoyed!

~ May your toes remain jam free for all the days of your life! ~ tehe

Linda

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