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Bill Charles
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0 posted 2002-09-22 12:41 PM


“INTO THE DARKNESS”
by
Bill Charles
~~~~
Watched you go this morning,
said goodbye for a long time…
Held you close and whispered,
you’re only once in a lifetime…

It felt like I was in a dream,
when one isn’t asleep or awake …
Fingers parted and you were gone,
at first signs of mornings break…

I somehow knew when this night began,
dawn’s light would become blackness…
Another tear would slowly form within,
and I would again drift, into the darkness…
~~~~

© Copyright 2002 Bill Charles - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2002-09-22 12:45 PM


Bill,
Those things happen, enjoyed the read.

Krishankins
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2 posted 2002-09-22 01:00 PM


nicely done, Bill! this is SO romantic nd sad!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Gabriel Frost
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3 posted 2002-09-22 01:02 PM


Great job Bill, as usual, you always set standards of greatness with your poetry.
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4 posted 2002-09-22 01:19 PM


Held you close and whispered,
you’re only once in a lifetime…

Well done Bill...but tis a sad one. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

SmartChick
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5 posted 2002-09-22 01:55 PM


This is so sad, Bill.
Enchantress
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6 posted 2002-09-22 02:12 PM


Wonderful Bill...sad yet one of your better writes!
Enjoyed much!
~hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Ems
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7 posted 2002-09-22 02:44 PM


It can be difficult to use rhythm and rhyme like this without spoiling the poetry, the meaning behind it, and the message you want to put across. You do this well. Ems x-x-x
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8 posted 2002-09-22 02:54 PM




(big hugggsssss) Oh Bill, this sounds so sad, I hope everything is better now and you have found your way back into the light of hope, hang in there, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie
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9 posted 2002-09-22 03:19 PM


Bill

You have written the hurt of goodbye...the longing easily felt with your words.  

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