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"Suspicious"
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"Suspicious" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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"Suspicious" ...how long now has this suspicion lingered ~ crumbling foundations ~ ...when must one first learn to mistrust one’s own ~ self ~ ...how was it that no traces were found, till now ~ destroying beliefs ~ ...its presence becoming habit on itself, not by invitation ~ slivering pleasures ~ ...fingering its way in, swathing thoughts like a ragged loiterer ~ casting shadows with caliginous treacle ~ ...taking up an alleyway like a scrawny, flea infested cat, begging sustenance off me ~ wondering where the pain will center ~ ...then becoming bolder and not begging at all, but stealing away what was once mine ~ my inner feelings now exposed ~ ...leaving only suspicion of what it could be as it darts like that alley cat hiding behind nuances of levels, sinews and bone ...“a suspicious showing” on the inside out film, opaque but still me ...suspiciously, with a verdict all its own. ~*~ ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 14 July 2001 ever so slightly revised 22 September 2002 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Walking, occasionally stopping, turning.. feeling as though there was something, someone there.... walking again...yet... still wondering and ever suspicious of what one might find...in the mirror and beyond... Do love this write....flows with the feel of the title....very heavily.... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like the way your thoughts flow. Very good write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"...“a suspicious showing” on the inside out film, opaque but still me ...suspiciously, with a verdict all its own."   BRAVO!!! Oh Karilea, I know just how you feel, I have been deceived time to time and while I hate to be the role of a spiritual detective I always want to learn of someone before I grow to give that someone trust so I don't get hurt again. (sigh) This is wonderfully said, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Suspicion can be so haunting. The doubt is felt in these words Sunshine. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"...how long now has this suspicion lingered ~ crumbling foundations ~ ...when must one first learn to mistrust one’s own ~ self ~" ---------------------------------------- Dang girl..sometimes you dig deep and make me think... (a good thing!) Excellent write here! ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea Chilling feelings here, colored so well with imagery well done.  |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
a poetess with coruscation and a lexicon to match... a pleasure to read my poetic neighbor to the north. [This message has been edited by Tim (09-22-2002 03:20 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
 Where's my dictionary when I need it? No paranoimia in this, I hope. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Magnificent expression and image...to cast in shadow what cannot be seen... ThisDiamond |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
It gave me a bit of the chills, Karilea... If we can't trust ourselves... who then, can we trust? This almost sounds like a dual personality fighting with itself... Very thought provoking and well done...  ~ suspicious chipmunk hugsLyra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yes... I love this Kari... It hits the inner "ear" with truth... and, familiarity... Even if this was not written from a personal viewpoint...it rang personal bells over here. Thank you.  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A stunner, Sunshine. Wrapped in wisdom, hurt and care. |
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