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WhileIWasGone
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0 posted 2002-09-20 07:49 PM



Wings beat down the shallow breath,
The caress of time against shallow waves,
Patience stifled the abyss of suffering,
As he languidly rolled into slumber.

Winds blew against the coherent state,
Weathering a pattern if ill fated storms,
sunlight filtered across ebony lashes
as time continued its slow waltz..

Casting aside the course of ancients,
awakening a dawn of knowledge,
Ascending through the clouds of emotions,
cast adrift in a sea of thoughts.

A single rose withered and crumbled,
as another life departed the realms,
a single tear rolled down cheeks of satin,
as she closed the doors to her heart.

Moonlight danced upon the epitaph,
as fingers slender and cold did trace,
sworn vows of the heart to be finished,
as silent tears rolled down her face.

A love be lost, but not forgotten,
as sands of time, through fingers, drain,
belonging to no one other then he,
her tears vanished within the rain.





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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2002-09-20 07:53 PM


What a beautifully flowing piece, WhileIWasGone. Delicately composed ... you've captured such a tender mood of contemplation, very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Martie
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2 posted 2002-09-20 07:55 PM




Sadness and sorrow, beautifully told.

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3 posted 2002-09-20 08:19 PM


A single rose withered and crumbled,
as another life departed the realms,
a single tear rolled down cheeks of satin,
as she closed the doors to her heart.

Moonlight danced upon the epitaph,
as fingers slender and cold did trace,
sworn vows of the heart to be finished,
as silent tears rolled down her face.


Haunting and beautiful in the same breath, a stunning poem.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

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4 posted 2002-09-22 08:27 PM


I just couldn't let this thing of haunting and fragile beauty, drift away into the back pages, without giving others the chance to experience it.

You can just flat out write, lady.

~Ed

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5 posted 2002-09-22 09:03 PM


This gave me chills and made me cry with it's haunting sadness and beautiful writing...
Ed is right, Dea... You sure can write...
~ teary chipmunk hugs

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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6 posted 2002-09-22 09:13 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) This is so very sad, sweet friend, you speak of such depth and contemplation in your words always, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Tracey
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7 posted 2002-09-22 09:59 PM


Not sure why, but this makes me picture a cold and rainy scene, in a graveyard by the seaside. I feel the haunting of the ghosts of love in this.

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

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8 posted 2002-09-25 06:22 PM


H., This felt heavy,
as though the storm
were still waiting to break.

A. L. Becker
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9 posted 2002-09-26 08:52 PM


dear WhileIWasGone,
your imagery and choice of words is brilliant, as usual.  
Annie!

"Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?'
Let us go and make our visit."
-Eliot

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