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Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

0 posted 2002-09-24 12:56 PM

A grievous dawn lay softly above
White sorrow clouded the sun
The bird of love has broken it's wing
As the first days without you have begun

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2002-09-24 12:59 PM

I really enjoyed this. That first day can be the hardest.

CSKpoet
Senior Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

2 posted 2002-09-24 01:58 AM

poignant and powerful emotions! hugs, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2002-09-24 02:03 AM

oh God, you break my heart Kris...

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

4 posted 2002-09-24 02:06 AM

You guys are making me blush!!

Hugs 2 U all!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2002-09-24 06:20 AM

Oh Kris, it seems I have started many a day with a grievous dawn. What a perfect way to put it.
Hugs
Sandra

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-09-24 08:37 AM

I hope this was just poetry and not a reflection of what is really going on in your personal life! If it is from true experience---is she nuts?!?

You have written some awesome lines---all four of them!

~ a smile and a hug from across the miles ~

Linda

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-09-24 10:59 AM

(big hugggsssss) Oh Kristopher, I too hope this is just poetry because it made me cry too reading it! (sigh) I wish for loves dove to always croon in your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristopher, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

8 posted 2002-09-24 11:07 AM

Excellent!!
Thank you Kris for this enjoyed read...
*~coco~*

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

9 posted 2002-09-24 04:20 PM

Hey Sweetness! I can definitely relate to this piece you have penned. I remember all the times you've inspired me
I'll have to get back in here more often and read ya!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2002-09-24 05:53 PM

Like this...James

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

11 posted 2002-09-24 11:37 PM

Oh, wow..... powerful, as is everything you write. I love it, Kris, as I love reading your work always.

Splendid.

By the way, would it be gramatically(sp) better to say wings? Just curious.

Sincerely,
Titus

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

12 posted 2002-09-25 10:34 PM

A grievous dawn lay softly above
White sorrow clouded the sun
The bird of love has broken it's wing
As the first days without you have begun
_____________________________________

The dawn not meant to be of grief
clouds, a shelter from the sun.
The bird with mended wing will fly.
A new day of life's begun.

As always Kris, you say so much with so few words. You are the master of this form. Nicely done once again.

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