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Gunslinger
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 901
TX, USA

0 posted 2002-09-19 12:58 PM

I've often tried to figure out-
Just where it all went wrong.
Just where I lost my vision;
And how I lost my song.

I used to be a dreamer.
My life was fantasy;
Oh, what an awful wakening,
To see as others see.

There was a girl who loved me.
To her I was a knight.
The agony I put her through...
Some wrongs you cannot right.

The saddest thing of all, I guess:
Is gazing into eyes,
That once were bright with laughter,
And wide with each surprise.

But now they're vacant windows-
So sad, and dead, and cold.
Gone the vibrancy of youth,
They're empty now and old.

Sometimes I'd like to find the grave,
Where that sweet soul was laid.
And lay down there, myself, and die,
And mark the ledger "Paid"!

pmc
Junior Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 48
Germany

1 posted 2002-09-19 11:04 AM

The saddest thing of all, I guess:
Is gazing into eyes,
That once were bright with laughter,
And wide with each surprise.

But now they're vacant windows-
So sad, and dead, and cold.
Gone the vibrancy of youth,
They're empty now and old.

Hello Gunslinger,

I think this is excellent.

pmc.

Thomas119gold
Senior Member

since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

2 posted 2002-09-19 11:27 AM

Fantastic write enjoyed this even though it is very sad.
Thomas

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2002-09-19 11:30 AM

yes sir, I know what you mean by this...ain't it a shame? Good write of this perspective.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-09-19 03:04 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2002-09-19 03:12 PM

Gunslinger - oh, what a heartfelt write this is. Enjoyed with a tear. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 2002-09-19 08:48 PM

Very sad and very well expressed, John.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2002-09-21 12:13 PM

This is beautiful, tragic, and totally sad. And I love the rhyme and rhythm too. Wonderful poem.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

8 posted 2002-09-21 03:26 AM

GS,
Such talent you have. And heart. I like that.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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