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EagleScorpion
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Here, Now, Forever


0 posted 09-18-2002 11:25 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for EagleScorpion


The dreams come and go, amidst the town buildings,
I walk down a street among faces I dont know,
In a familiar city that doesn't exist,
I knew my way around.
These people were my friends, knew them I did.
Yet when I wake up I realize we never met.
I swim in water, yet I remain dry,
We played in the dark warehouse pool,
Surfing upon the intangible,
I hear my old songs, for they'll never die,
I tumble through this reverie without asking why,
Inside a dark warehouse, this pool of dry water rests.

Life is a lonely journey to, and a heavy-hearted departure from three words. I LOVE YOU

© Copyright 2002 Joseph Alexander Knob - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 09-18-2002 11:36 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

Awesome

Cold hands means a warm heart

GOlDsparklESS
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2 posted 09-19-2002 04:42 PM       View Profile for GOlDsparklESS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GOlDsparklESS

Surfing upon the intangible,
I hear my old songs, for they'll never die,
I tumble through this reverie without asking why,
Inside a dark warehouse, this pool of dry water rests


This is deep.  Your poem has very mystical ambience.  

Kielo
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3 posted 09-19-2002 05:35 PM       View Profile for Kielo   Email Kielo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kielo

Mystical ambiance? I can't beat that, so I'll settle for telling you it was a wonderful poem.

Kielo
EagleScorpion
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4 posted 09-21-2002 02:51 AM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

loner, sparkles, kielo, thank you for reading. this was actually a dream I had years ago... one of those vividly remembered ones that leaves an impact of wonder

I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you.

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5 posted 09-21-2002 12:21 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

this reads like a dream would be experienced. I think you've done a wonderful job with it. I can never capture them like this. I love this.

*Jenn*

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 09-21-2002 12:50 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Sometimes we dream of things and can never quite capture them the way we saw them, but you have done an absolute wonderful job with this!

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Ceinwyn
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7 posted 09-21-2002 03:20 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

yes what they all said I agree! you painted this picture well in my mind..can you say goosebumps!?

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

EagleScorpion
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8 posted 07-16-2003 05:58 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

its funny .. i can still remember tidbits of this particular dream that i forgot to mention.. at one point me and my "friends" were in a parking garage and then there was a large rectangular mirror and something sprfaypainted on it.. ohhh whatever that was so long ago
 
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