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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2002-09-18 11:12 AM


What kind of bird be thee
that sits noisily in yonder tree
daily, gaily mocking me?

I look to see
but am again blinded
by your deceitful beauty.

And when
I say I love you,
yet you mock me!

Fly away please,
I’ve heard your song
too many times.

It is no longer
a sweet refrain,
but the song of pain.



© Copyright 2002 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-09-18 11:28 AM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Kacy, I hope all is well with you, sweet friend, may you find the true canary of your heart who will always sing songs of compassionate love to you, this is touching, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kacy, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-09-18 11:33 AM


Kacy,
This is excellent.  

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3 posted 2002-09-18 12:38 PM


Got the little tweeter in the crosshairs!!!  Sorry, some birds just gotta go.  lol
(Wish it was that easy)

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4 posted 2002-09-18 01:09 PM


Noah, it's ok, it's just poetry.

Thank you, Sy!

Duncan!!!

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5 posted 2002-09-18 01:15 PM


Should I make soup of the little tweeter?
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6 posted 2002-09-18 06:17 PM



This is a gem of poem. You've written this so well and the metaphor you used was so effective in conveying your message.

Are you sure it wasn't a turkey? He sounds like one to me! hehe

Linda

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7 posted 2002-09-18 06:23 PM


Wonderful use of metaphor. Very nice and sadly .... a timeless message

... and they sent him home happy ... one hundred percent.

jwesley
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8 posted 2002-09-18 06:59 PM


....but have you ever noticed with Mockingbirds... or others, that when one leaves, another comes to take his place... in a way, perpetual song my friend.

jwesley

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