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An Apple One Day Did....... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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If one does have the grace to bare the soul to let the cloth on skin then fall to floor as did of two the taste in garden toll the bell of sin upon the eyes explore. The scale of skin deceives the minds anew as fruits so fresh did touch the lips in haste. Slithering then away as serpents do before the words were heard in hurried chaste. But when the touch of vine did bring to dwell the lust of man for she who gave the fruit. Then came the start of thoughts then born of hell as two did stand and stare the birthday suit. Before the snake does whisper in one’s ear give thought to that which one did surely hear. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a cool poem Cold hands means a warm heart |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
very cool and well done< Barry..yep it tis the very thing that does get us in all sorts of trouble...this was a very interesting point of view and excellent as is your usual. take care, Cher Poetry is: |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Julie, glad you got a grin from this one... Cher, don't ask me why I did it this way, I am clueless about that....pleased you enjoyed it...take care... |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work Magnus....enjoyed much! DeaDiAmore |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  Wow, I don't think Cheryl could have summarized this any better, this is excellent, we must always respect and tame the serpent as we taste that very apple with delicacy, this is well-said, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Good message here Magnus - well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Adam, it wasn't all my fault! Eve Dear Barry---this was brilliant! Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Good one Barry, enjoyed the read. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
cool poem,yes indeed!!!!!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oh yes, Barry... Maybe apples should be made illegal  A beautiful poem Lyra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Baring the soul is hard enough... there are so many veils... Well done, sir... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
well... me for one, never had a problem staring at the birthday suite - though I have to admit, like Adam, sometimes, I too, got in trouble for doing so...hee, hee... Loved it Barry... jwesley |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The form and feel of this put me in mind of the old masters, though I've only read a few.  A second read was in order and even more enjoyable than the first...when I had the full gist of what this was 'really' about and could read it all the way with an informed eye/mind. Superbly done, finely captured historic event and lesson. Your summation/caveat at the end is excellent! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry A thougtful, and well done poem. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Best telling of that story I have ever heard. Hugs Sandra |
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