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Martie
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0 posted 2002-09-16 04:56 PM



Touch me with the underside of you
the true place
where you go on dark nights in between dreams
to the place that folds the sky

The canopy there is made with encompassing
and has no easy words

Can it be just a feather bed
that the drought of air has left vapid
with cloth that resists wrinkle

my digging fingers declare the earth be sky
there        under my nails
I'll find pieces of you
filling up holes in thought
asking for seed

Wanting         wanting to grow
from all this wasteland of greed
one stem

Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real


© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-09-16 04:57 PM


Wonderfully written

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2002-09-16 05:01 PM


my digging fingers declare the earth be sky
there        under my nails
I'll find pieces of you
filling up holes in thought
asking for seed

Wanting         wanting to grow
from all this wasteland of greed
one stem

Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real
An earthy and gritty feel to these lines... almost as if looking for something to make you feel alive....

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3 posted 2002-09-16 05:04 PM


Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real

There you go again Martie....making me sit back and shake my head in awe. Wonderful writing. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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4 posted 2002-09-16 05:09 PM


Wow Martie....have you been taking anything
special that gets you all wound up,  or is
it just everything around you?  I know,
I know....it must be .....  Nawwwww,  can't
be that...

HUGS lady,  nicely done...very nicely done..

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5 posted 2002-09-16 05:30 PM


Wow Martie, this is really excellent writing, you took my breath away dear lady... heh as usual

hugs you

M

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6 posted 2002-09-16 06:12 PM




(smiles) Oh Martie, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, and may he always take your hand and dive for pearls of heaven with you in your dreams and beyond! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, I am deeply touched by your words always, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-09-16 07:11 PM


Character within a poem from an excellent poet.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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8 posted 2002-09-16 08:02 PM


Beautiful work Martie...enjoyed much.

DeaDiAmore

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9 posted 2002-09-16 08:16 PM


Martie~

You make it feel sooooooo easy ....~

'Touch me with the underside of you
the true place
where you go on dark nights in between dreams
to the place that folds the sky

The canopy there is made with encompassing
and has no easy words'


Once in a while ... you leave me quizzically perplexed ...
I 'think' that may be a good thing~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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10 posted 2002-09-16 08:35 PM


Martie - great verse, great writing....

Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real

BC

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11 posted 2002-09-16 09:03 PM


Poetry---sheer poetry! Excuse me, I'm going back to immerse myself in your words once more.

~ smiles ~
Linda

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12 posted 2002-09-16 09:08 PM


Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real
------------------------------------------
Amazing write sweet poetess!
You never fail to take my breath away with your words.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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13 posted 2002-09-16 10:12 PM


My underside is yours, Martie!!
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14 posted 2002-09-17 10:52 AM


I simply had to return and read this again ..then realized the reason why. It captured something inside of me that I was unable to say myself... thanks for that my friend.


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15 posted 2002-09-17 03:52 PM


You want to feel the scratch of real, Martie?  (Ain't sayin' what I'm thinking) LOL!  Loved this, sweetie.
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16 posted 2002-09-17 07:52 PM



Well there are those that have read this, a few have come across with lighthearted repartee...

all I can say is, I'm bleeding...

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17 posted 2002-09-18 12:14 PM


I feel the scratch of real, Martie...
Not sure if you really want to or not... Please think about it...
The poem is absolutely awesome... I love the raw feel of it.

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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18 posted 2002-09-18 05:20 AM


at first I wanted to remark on the softness… but, no… its there, but moreso, theres an insistence…

nothing so frantic as desperation… but not as strong as demand; a strange mix of two quiet sides of both… a muted passionate call for the ‘real’ (if there is such a contradiction… martie, i swear its there)

oh, and maybe i am so far off the mark… but i read a struggle, and longing, longing… this is… harder? more aggressive than im used to seeing… its wonderful. lol martie with an edge. oh, i felt this one.

it is always such a joy to read you. thank you so much.

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods
19 posted 2002-09-18 05:22 AM


sorry, had to come back... forgot to share my favorite lines
... these dug right in:

“Touch me with the underside of you

my digging fingers declare the earth be sky
there        under my nails
I'll find pieces of you

Touch me with the callus of that star
with its rough edge
I want to feel the scratch of real”

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