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Wrapping Up Lies
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Wrapping Up Lies |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
They were cellophane lines. Colored in off shades Crackling when read Yet remaining semitransparent with the meaning almost clearly seen as they wrapped One on another down a page Leaving nothing uncovered To grow stale From exposure Belying the perfidy of acts Extolling the intimate loosing Of now for past They were not sucked in nostrils off a mirror, polished still they gave a high to some Ingesting them with abandon Only to lie about in stupor Telling each the other How good it had been Then How bad it was Now Brittle wrapping on such thoughts Is bound to split in time Yet for now they Cellophane Pretty |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Something wicked in me wants to leave a one line reply. Oh what the hell. Make it three.  do smilies count? I never did know when to stop. Nothing like hitting bottom to get you to rehab...rofl... Enjoyed. heh heh? I'll shaddup now. Yeah, that's what they all say. (serenity exits, via intervention...) |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Good poem Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Powdered with deep thoughts. Loved the imagery here. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and by the way, it's a perfect metaphor. The one word sarcasm ending this is sublime. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a serious write...I can't say I've been there/done that... but your thoughts were clearly expressed. ~smiling to see you here Maureen |
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geenabee Member
since 2002-09-10
Posts 59NC--USA |
Lots of layers here, and i sense a true grasp of the falseness of it all... man yer deep! Someday I hope to find a depth where I can write comfortably without seeking the frivolous surface too soon. yers truly gb |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Ron, this is wonderful, your wonderful words and visions never cease to amaze me, this is another keeper under wraps, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ron, If we could unwrap cellophane and find those words you wrote in repose-- it would be worth it all. Mike |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Cellophane does create some pretty colors when they're overlapped, but in the end they are separate when unwrapped. I love this metaphor...coming from you. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think you've done landed a few fish, here, Sir...hook, line, and sinker... Bravo! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Me too...all the above...and the last line - catch all... . jwesley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wonderful metaphor use, making for a powerful poem *smile* |
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