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Furie
Junior Member

since 2002-06-17

Posts 39
Myriad of Unkown Places

0 posted 2002-09-15 08:05 PM

Reflections of Rain

...And so the pounding torrents against my roof subside
Into gentler patters upon the pavement, then take up
A medium, steady fall, and the lamplight cuts through
The shining gloom, the beauty of the rainy day.

I know I am loved, out there, someplace where you are
In patience and faith. I can see it when you speak of me
When my mood is mellower and I fail to detect vinegar,
The pungent wine that is my repellant.

When arms are opened readily, without intent to push away
My tentative step beyond this door, when I need not fear
Glinting daggers awaiting me, when I do not feel unwelcome,
Then, and only, do I emerge from the darkness behind the wall.

And again, I thank you for that whispered melody...
A reminder that I have not been forsaken.
But I would have you know that it is not love poetry,
Nor is it voice that stirs me, though yours is engaging.

It is not poetry in motion, but emotion in flow
Directly from the spirit of the author, the essence
Of what he is made of, that lifts and captures me,
That fills the emptiness within and gives completion.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-09-15 08:12 PM

"It is not poetry in motion, but emotion in flow"

---Yes, my emotion is now in flow, but it is because of your "poetry in motion"!

Well done!
Earth Angel

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-09-15 08:20 PM

(sigh) And your wonderful words always cascade with rhythm and bring motion to your heart and voice with inspiration! (big hugggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Furie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2002-09-15 08:25 PM

Furie - this is poetry in motion and emotion in flow from what I've read. Just stunning....

BC

Crazy Eddie
Member

since 2002-09-14

Posts 178

4 posted 2002-09-15 08:37 PM

Excellent write!

I could just stop there but it’s only fair to tell you why I think that.

The matter-of-factness caught me, at first I thought it was a mistake; a lack of depth, but there is depth in your descriptions and imagery so it couldn’t be that.

After the second read it struck me, it was the monotone voice of reason and resolution, this was a clear and certain explanation of emotion delivered with the voice of certainty.

Or maybe it was just an excellent write.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-09-15 08:38 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

6 posted 2002-09-15 11:10 PM

Oh my, this is ….heavenly I think. Many lines struck a chord with me, but in particular:

I know I am loved, out there, someplace where you are
In patience and faith. I can see it when you speak of me

(A calm, serene acceptance)

And again, I thank you for that whispered melody...
A reminder that I have not been forsaken.

(And a humble joy at being loved)

A wonderful piece of poetry, and one that took me to a wished for piece of my past.

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

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