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DonFurr
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since 2001-01-01
Posts 172
Monticello IN

0 posted 2002-09-14 02:30 AM



Winds of both joy and loss
echo within my heart
Women I care for have found
their only missing part
Love has come to each of them
and this is the joy I feel
Love has come to each of them
and with this loss I reel
Faith sustains me in this storm
because of what I know
There comes a time soon for me
when I shall also glow

© Copyright 2002 Don Furr - All Rights Reserved
Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York
1 posted 2002-09-14 02:32 AM


"Winds of both joy and loss
echo within my heart"

This is how I often feel. The poem made me feel better.  That I am not alone. and hopefully no one will leave me alone.

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise
2 posted 2002-09-14 09:28 AM


Wonderful writing; I enjoyed this very much.

Hugs, Marti

smitty-j
Member
since 2002-09-13
Posts 72
Florida, USA
3 posted 2002-09-14 10:33 AM


I'm no poet. I've only just begun to give it a go, and I've read many here that are completely over my head but I really liked yours and can feel the flow of poems like this. So I would like to give my humble suggestions and if I get bashed...thats ok too. so here goes...

Winds of change, both joy and loss
echo here within my heart
Women that I've cared for now
have found their missing part
Love has come to each of them
and this the joy I feel
Love has come to each of them
and with this loss I reel
Faith sustains me in this storm
because of what I know
There comes a time so soon for me
when I shall also glow
(i think this would also sound good with "grow")


Hope I didn't offend anyone....forgive me, I'm new (^_~)

Julie

WhileIWasGone
Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486

4 posted 2002-09-14 10:47 AM


Nice work...enjoyed very much.

DeaDiAmore

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