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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-09-11 09:28 AM


oh the day the towers fell
now I am to wax profound?
YOU want politica to tell...
How does one start to write the sound?

IMPACT
dust--fire--dust--
where are words for such a sound?
A double Hindenburg in bust--
towers rabbeling to ground.

Steel and glass
became repast
of those in chuckle--
"allah praised"
now it's time to move--
and fast

their demise in toast of raise
sands in smooth of hour's glass...

we were sold
a dream of gold--
oh-we-ate-the-opiates
oh-behold
the-stories-told
protected by the Roman's fate.

And now we can pretend to know
the story of what happened since.
We wrap our ribbons round the trees
light candles and we light incense.

Someone? Tell the history
of how this story came to be...
Tell us how the oil ran deep
tell the secrets of the greed--
how we sold a loaf--leavened--
and had to fight ourselves--AGAIN.

Tell them, that we sold our men
and women in the desert sand.
Spin it up real good and then?
Paint it up in ribboned strand
of the ole red white and blue...

my god, I wish this wasn't true...

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2002-09-11 09:38 AM


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serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-09-11 09:43 AM


Well...I guess it is really clear I'm not running for miss congeniality...sigh...I just wanted to add a different color candle to the light of understanding?

Nancy?

I wave to you a UNIVERSAL FLAG.

peace.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2002-09-11 09:52 AM


A very impassioned piece of writing!----very thought-provoking as well. You tell things the way you see them. I am always interested in your perspectives and how you view the world.

Earth Angel

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-09-11 10:01 AM


Serenity,
I understand all you say and have no answers.
But your write is excellent.

vandana
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5 posted 2002-09-11 10:02 AM


enjoyed
serenity blaze
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6 posted 2002-09-11 10:05 AM


I was going to ask that this be deleted for fear I only added to the pain....never my intention, m'friends.

I lost friends too.

WhiteRose
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7 posted 2002-09-11 10:16 AM


You in no way added to the pain. This a writing from the dust of what once was and obviously a pained write as well. An incredible poem and one you should be proud of.
bsquirrel
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8 posted 2002-09-11 12:33 PM


Sen,
There is sentimentality,
and there is understanding.
I wish you were working
for a major TV network.

*hug*

Mikey

Moonlight Romeo
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The heart of you
9 posted 2002-09-11 12:57 PM


This is a voice, and voices, all voices, must be heard.  That is the promise.  

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

brian sites
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10 posted 2002-09-11 01:00 PM


to the heart
of the matter
farther than most
want to tread

VAS
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11 posted 2002-09-11 01:06 PM


you mentioned Rome,
well Rome has moved west,
but oddly enough
though Rome fell
while Nero fiddled
it rose again in more than one place

very thought provoking lines in your work here
I wish there was no reason for any of these 9/11 poems to even be, let alone hold truths in them, sharp, painful truths

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

doreen peri
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12 posted 2002-09-11 01:19 PM


it's all about greed
it's all about oil
and soon they'll be bloodshed
on yet another soil???

if the US invades Iraq, i will hide my head in shame

you said a mouthful here, harpo

geenabee
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13 posted 2002-09-11 01:46 PM


Truth in its most pure form
and a plea to know--TO KNOW--the whys
the reasons...
as maniacal as they are...
We pine for sanity amid this heinous fallacy of fervor.
Who ever heard of the deaths of so many bringing about anything but towers of grief!
This is the poem that should be remembered.
These are the concepts that should be SHOUTED from the top of the Empire State Building!!!

glad, so glad, to read ya,
GB

WhileIWasGone
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14 posted 2002-09-11 02:30 PM


GREAT WORK!!!! Enjoyed very much.

DeaDiAmore

Sunshine
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15 posted 2002-09-11 02:37 PM



My God, I wish this wasn't true...

Well done, m'dear....

EarthenSoul
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16 posted 2002-09-11 02:39 PM


I'm glad that you've left this post up.  I appreciate your honesty!  This is a work to be proud of.
Krawdad
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17 posted 2002-09-11 02:54 PM


k,
thank you
(this still burns too white for me to touch . . . maybe one day . . .)
e

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