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WhileIWasGone
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0 posted 2002-09-09 01:06 AM



I Will
When the sunset
dilutes itself in the soothing
earth of your eyes
and the green
falls to loam.
When the dew
like tiny constellations
glistens in silken webs
and sleeping spiders.
When the last sorrows
are forgotten among
the black foliage
of nameless melancholy-
gray that feels pink.
I will, but don't
ask me until the time
comes.
I'll remember when
fatigue quakes in the
muscles of your mistakes
of memory; don't
rush the moonrise,
don't question
my will, it happens
always when I will
the wrong time right,
and the passion fades
from the planet's sight.



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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-09-09 01:11 AM


This is outstanding. What a joy it is to read such beautiful imagery, such depth of pure honest emotion.
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-09-09 01:17 AM


You do write beautifully.


~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2002-09-09 01:28 AM


When the last sorrows
are forgotten among
the black foliage
of nameless melancholy-


Oh yes,  you do write exquisitely!
Your thoughts are delicately laced
and so fine!!  Indeed, the pleasure was all mine!!!  

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2002-09-09 02:22 PM


I'll remember when
fatigue quakes in the
muscles of your mistakes
of memory; don't
rush the moonrise,
don't question
my will, it happens
always when I will
the wrong time right,
and the passion fades
from the planet's sight.

such beautiful phrasing..I loved it..
*s
M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (09-09-2002 02:25 PM).]

bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-09-10 05:33 PM


You are a treasure to this place, H.

M.

vandana
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USA
6 posted 2002-09-10 05:34 PM


enjoyed welcome to passions
brian sites
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usa
7 posted 2002-09-10 07:23 PM


this
is like a long sigh
of lace
man..(shaking head)
brian

Martie
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California
8 posted 2002-09-10 07:58 PM


Yes...read like a sigh.... beautiful.  
Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan
9 posted 2002-09-10 08:06 PM


I love your imagery, Dea...
Very beautiful...
~ loving hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon
10 posted 2002-09-10 09:48 PM


Incredible! Absolutely incredible!

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (09-10-2002 09:49 PM).]

WhileIWasGone
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11 posted 2002-09-10 09:55 PM


Thank you all...for the sweet replies and thanks for reading.

DeaDiAmore

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