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This Text of Masks....

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Martie
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   This Text of Masks

We were all women
tossed about in a circle, some on chairs
and some with dare to flay upon the carpet,
less vulnerable perhaps with touch of floor
and place that seemed much closer to the door.

Each chose a mask to wear,
like lace across a table it made us bare,
with laugh and tears made from a mold
and anger whispered with a scream,
oh, the cold was bold.

We were women wearing masks that day,
to say for us the touch too much
had turned,  the innocent to fall,
this text of masks recalls the loss of play.  

And so we took these masks
like truth in spoon
and filled the plastic mouth with it
then spit it out into the room.


[This message has been edited by Martie (09-08-2002 10:55 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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YES!
You took th' challenge.
And beat me to the ground.


Awesome, Martie.
I can hear the
cr/laughter/ying.

Mikey
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BRAVO!
Superb, Martie!
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Brilliantly done!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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4 posted 09-08-2002 07:16 AM       View Profile for Lady In White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady In White


Our Guardian of the Gate said it best...
I too, hear the sound...
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5 posted 09-08-2002 08:21 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

You never lose your wonderful touch....This is exceptional!
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6 posted 09-08-2002 08:37 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Martie,
Most of your writing is excellent but this is exceptional. :sqeeze:
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Excellent!
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Martie, superb reply to the challenge.  You always amaze.....

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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A mask that covered tears
that did hide waking fears
A mask of veil in innocence
of what is lost in true sense

A mask worn by one and all
to a moment scared, not a ball.
A mask which revealed that day
was not for fun,  nor for play.

Beautifully done dear one...  I think you
have expressed the feel well...

[This message has been edited by Magnus (09-08-2002 10:54 AM).]

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I must go read what the specific challenge was, but it is quite a poem even not knowing the exact request.

Do wonder if you meant "woman" or perhaps "women." I can see reasons for either, but am curious.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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YAY!!! Oh Martie, this is absolutely beautiful, I LOVE IT, to dispose of ones mask and reveal the true colors and eyeshadowed thoughts beneath is a wonderful fresh feeling! (kiss on cheek) Yay, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Mike...thanks for such an interesting phrase to work with.

Midnite...thanks for that wonderful S word.

Kethry...Thank you...wish I could have made the peal more real.  Group therepy often strips off masks with feel.

Lady...I wore the mask of tears...perhaps you heard me crying.

Eric...thank you, my friend.

Sy--You're quite a guy!

White Rose--Thank you for spending time reading my poems..your replies are most apprecitaed.

Donna--You are very kind to say this.

Barry--A wonderful poem of understanding...thank you.

Virginia--you're absolutely right...I am woman, they were women...thank  you.

Noah--Sometimes it is hard to reveal the true colors...but it is important..yes!  Thank you.

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Martie - your poem is marvelous - I loved it - Paul
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Thank you, thank you for pointing this out to me, my sweet Marite.

After yet another long day yesterday, I was just sitting here, thinking of all the different roles I have played in life and I wondered which "mask" was really me...

I think it's this one, here at Pip.

I keep saying I never meant to stay, but I found this place where I could just be myself, yanno? Now if I can only fuse the personalities...

I love you muchly Lady Grace.

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...like truth in spoon....

~*~

And this made me oh, so, wonder
of all the seasons often pondered
of wisp and wind and spoons
that may spill the dam too soon...

~*~

And it is time, m'dear, it is time...
to pull the togethers of your mind.

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