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ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2002-09-06 04:16 PM



Well it's a crazy world after romance
and the lawyers love people with rights
The journals of wrong gave us no chance
until we settled on mutually nice.
Family ties got tossed in a canyon
Where the strength of all reason erodes
Now we're feelin the lonely abandon
on life's restless and empty byroads

Chorus:
I know our world turned tragic
All the turmoil was unkind
And we found Cupid's magic
Was a trick that played on our mind

Well we used to make love in the moonlight
Oh the heat was as hot as the sun.
And time would just stop it was so right
on into the night we would run.
Now we're tried by the toil of existence
while we care for the children we share
But we've finally found that forgiveness
Keeps us movin from hurt to aware

Rep chorus.


The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

© Copyright 2002 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2002-09-06 04:19 PM


"Now we're tried by the toil of existence
                     while we care for the children we share
                     But we've finally found that forgiveness
                     Keeps us movin from hurt to aware"




(big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, this is a wonderful song, I love it, I hope soon you pit more MP3s of you singing with your poems because I downloaded your debut on my computer and every time I play it I smile because you have such a beautiful voice with your lyrics! (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love to write songs too like my 16,000th post I wrote for Joanna and I hope to write like you, you are a true inspiration, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2002-09-06 05:41 PM


I know our world turned tragic
All the turmoil was unkind
And we found Cupid's magic
Was a trick that played on our mind

Well we used to make love in the moonlight
Oh the heat was as hot as the sun.
And time would just stop it was so right
on into the night we would run.

Now we're tried by the toil of existence
while we care for the children we share
But we've finally found that forgiveness
Keeps us movin from hurt to aware

===================================


Ive said this many times before, but it will always bear repeating...

YOU ROCK!!!

I swear you got melodics and harmony running thru your veins and your blood flows in moody blues


And the truth, irony and wisdom of that first verse is cooler than cool....

The journals of wrong gave us no chance
until we settled on mutually nice.



Yep...youre a music man poet...
Yeppers..you rock

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2002-09-06 06:35 PM


ETHome~

'we used to make love in the moonlight
Oh the heat was as hot as the sun'


I need no other thought ...
this is the one that will stick in my mind~

Beautifully done~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
           noles1@totcon.com                       

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
4 posted 2002-09-06 06:39 PM


Like this a lot, Ethan! You better get cutting that demo!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-09-06 07:15 PM


...FANTASTIC!!!...

Martie
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6 posted 2002-09-06 07:23 PM


Eric

Life set to rhythm and blues...JM is right...you rock!!!!!

brian madden
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ireland
7 posted 2002-09-06 07:39 PM


Sure bets the hell out of Britney...lol

I am with Jan on this, way cool write.  

Battle not with monsters lest ye become a monster, and if you gaze into the abyss, the abyss gazes also into you. - Friedrich W. Nietzsche

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