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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-09-06 07:55 AM


Shades of Metaphor

I soar in nightly raw
Among my shadows metaphor
From glad to glad I wade
In and out its play of shade

Searching my inner dim
The workings of my sinners prim
That hovers o’er my bare
And flicks me with those whips ensnare.

Contrariety of men
That cannot find an open glen
That wonder in the mist
Searching out their private gist.

That feels and hears its crime
Those ghosts that ride the sands of time
And hosts me thru this dwell
To toast me o’er its fires hell

While I in hopeless nightly lie
Lay drawn and quartered on the why.


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1 posted 2002-09-06 08:07 AM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Seymour, this is excellent, I know just what you mean, and the gist is all right there to those who are yearning for it, they just have to think simpler! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-09-06 08:25 AM


Sy:
How well you pen the workings of the man inside. Such insight to be gained, from what the mind knows and the heart has not yet learned. Really liked this one. ThisDiamond

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3 posted 2002-09-06 08:49 AM


Ah Sy, how I do love your morning pearls of wisdom.
Stay, chat and have some tea love?
~Morning hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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4 posted 2002-09-06 08:55 AM


I soar in nightly raw
Among my shadows metaphor
==========================

Searching my inner dim
The workings of my sinners prim
That hovers o'er my bare
And flicks me with those whips ensnare.

======================
That wonder in the mist
Searching out their private gist.

That feels and hears its crime
Those ghosts that ride the sands of time
And hosts me thru this dwell
To toast me o'er its fires hell

While I in hopeless nightly lie
Lay drawn and quartered on the why.

==================================


Me thinks Randy is influencing your pen upon the page again,
He's rattling his cage and snorting Hell Fire sin.
He'd like us to believe he has you roped and tied,
A dragon in misconceive, he hoped to render your pen stupefied.

This dragon 'tis no match for your metaphors,
It's your rhymes that allow him to roar and soar.
'Tis of your verse that his gist even exists,
Your pen in twist ... couplets of inspirations enlist.

The answers Randy wonders to the questions of why ...
lie in between the lines and rhymes of the poetry of Sy.

~~

*winkiewinkie*




Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2002-09-06 11:37 AM


Noah,
Thank you my friend for the read and reply.

This Diamond,
Thank you so much for the like.

Enchantress,
Good morning love, have a wonderful day.

JM,
Without the Randy there would be no candy.
Without the Yin there would be no Yang.
And the answer to the eternal why
is the eternal change to the eye.
WWRS

Krissy
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6 posted 2002-09-06 06:34 PM


Seymour Hi there, your writing is excellent do you know that? You have the ability to write the thought so beautifully. This is simply perfect in its flow and style, and this poem describes the feeling so well.

Do you have any idea how special and brilliant your writing is? I see in your writing how a writer of heart can be a writer of magic I watch your quill unfold such wonder and I’m awed. I know I’ll never be the caliber of writer you are you can write so well, and while time unfolds your pen speaks to me

I can’t wait till September, I am so looking forward to meeting you,

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy



And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

[This message has been edited by Krissy (09-06-2002 06:43 PM).]

Marsha
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7 posted 2002-09-06 07:22 PM


Seymour darling heart Truly exquisite writing there is within your soul so much beauty and so much life that I shouldn’t be surprised at how it spills out to grace the pages with it’s wisdom. But somehow I always am, because it exceeds my expectations always. Truly wonderful writing I love it utterly utterly

If the answer to the question is a question indeed
Will the answer satisfy the soul and fill its need
With the touch of knowledge be the touch you seek
Or is it too dark inside for the soul to take a peek

If the answer raises questions will the answers heard?
Satisfy the questions contained in a silent word?
Will thoughts that float within the darkness of night
Find the path to awakening in knowledge first light

If the answer is a question is the question always right?
Or will the question only find the answer in clear sight?
Will the darkness keep the mystery away from you?
Or will you resolve the enigma by looking all through

The truth is the question solved by wisdom’s touch
And in this touch the question reveals so much

As always your poem is simply perfect darling heart and I love it utterly

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-09-06 09:01 PM


Krissy,
A wonderful comment and I do look forward to meeting you and marsha. Thanks for taking the trouble to go back and find my poem.
See you soon.

Marsha,
Thank you for the lovely poem and reply. You are very sweet and I'm looking forward to seeing you.

Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2002-09-07 09:51 AM


Seymour~
Nobody gonna pull the shades on you, sir~
Voyeuristic poets we are~

'That hovers o’er my bare
And flicks me with those whips ensnare.'


*smiling* at the peek through the shades~

Thanks for leaving the shades up~ !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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WhiteRose
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10 posted 2002-09-07 10:07 AM


An interesting look inside. Well done Sy.
Sunshine
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11 posted 2002-09-07 10:14 AM



In the gist of mist
lies the list of kiss...

I didn't miss this one!

VAS
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12 posted 2002-09-07 10:21 AM


drawn and quartered on the why


an amazing line, me thinks!


contrarity of men (of course, you mean humankind, but as a woman, this put a bit of a turn up on the corners of my mouth, hehe)

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2002-09-07 12:36 PM


Marge,
Never thought you would peek through the shades. LOL

WhiteRose,
Thank you dear.

Sunshine,
just for you.

VAS,
Yes I did, thank you dear.

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