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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-09-05 07:50 PM





This text of masks



the façade unraveled,
                  a manuscript of clues
                                             left behind

the play of thoughts on how to disentangle
what had been here in my there
before the challenge…

for here
in my
there

had been the play of this gorgeous cloud filled
day,
the gray-in-blue-on-white pillowed puffs
of stuff
from which images are formed,

oh heavens, the height and breadth of them, their voluminous
unfoldings, billowing before me,
telling me

all manner of men need to make out of nothing,
something, and therefore,
form images

which brings God that much closer to me in my mind…
for in His image,

am I…

and then and now, to weave into the beauty of these
formations,
is formed the challenge,

this text of masks

and I draw my here
in there,

into His performance upon upper portions of these billowing,
gaseous formulations of ionic manipulations,
pushing here, carving there, curves so voluptuous
that the bas relief of it all
is what I see….

an angel in flight,
a man loving a woman,
a lone dog gone mad
a lion in hunt

a text of masks

in my here of there
gone wild


~*~



Mikey...you're a gem, and the challenge....was not easy....hope you enjoy!




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1 posted 2002-09-05 07:54 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, the challenge may not be easy, but you make it seem so easy, I LOVE IT!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) Yes, always look up and let your mind and soul rest and unravel all those masks of thoughts in porcelain and glass that reflect your face of the heart! (smiles) This is excellent, I'm adding this to my library because it is so good, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-09-05 07:56 PM


Karilea..your cloud does have faces..the second one frightened me.  A beautiful poem for this challange.
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3 posted 2002-09-05 08:00 PM


Sunshine---this was masterfully done, and full of caring. Mikey can't help but enjoy it!--I certainly did!

Linda

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4 posted 2002-09-05 09:11 PM


THIS--

an angel in flight,
a man loving a woman,
a lone dog gone mad
a lion in hunt

a text of masks

in my here of there
gone wild


IS BEAUTIFUL.

and the rest was so subtly clever...

can I please bow out of this challenge now?
I'm outta my league...groan...

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5 posted 2002-09-05 09:21 PM


Karilea...this is so beautiful!!
Challenge well met!
I'm not even going to attempt this one.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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6 posted 2002-09-06 06:46 AM


This is beautifully done... much enjoyed...

regards,
sudhir

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7 posted 2002-09-06 08:32 AM


So well done! Thrilling to see what I have felt put to words. Thanks Sunshine. ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2002-09-06 08:54 AM


such a well crafted response... bravo my friend! excellent!
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9 posted 2002-09-06 11:59 AM


Karilea,
If my jaw drops any farther, it will end up doubling back into the sky, among those clouds.

Eloquent, beautiful, rain-laden (without the rain) work. Hm, this one really *is* a challenge....

And you took it home.

Mikey

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10 posted 2002-09-06 12:05 PM


Karilea - All I can say is WOW !! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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11 posted 2002-09-06 02:13 PM


Kari, I don't even have the words for this but might I ask.......
please teach me!!!  There are no words for this beauty, into the treasure box it goes!

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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12 posted 2002-09-06 02:20 PM


This is such a gem and a keeper. You certainly honor the Creator of His art noveau....I adore clouds and am fortunate to see them often ...billowing by with faces. You met your challenge so very perfectly and have a wonderful work of art to add to your artful collection,
Cher

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Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

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13 posted 2002-09-06 02:25 PM


into His performance upon upper portions of these billowing,
gaseous formulations of ionic manipulations,
pushing here, carving there, curves so voluptuous
that the bas relief of it all
is what I see….

WOW Karliea, what a rush a beauty images. A wonderful write.

Battle not with monsters lest ye become a monster, and if you gaze into the abyss, the abyss gazes also into you. - Friedrich W. Nietzsche

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14 posted 2002-09-06 02:54 PM


BRAVA!
AUTHOR!
BRAVA!
Are you now "the wild thing?"

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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