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Hold me down (serenity proverb challenge)
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Hold me down (serenity proverb challenge) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Baby, hold me down. Roadway, hold me down. Pine hill, hold me down. Ocean, hold me down. I watch the sun's old light, snowy smooth as glass, submerged permafrost. Touching from below. Rainy small hand shapes pat my back, my hair, smoothe away asides. Ask me what I've done. Won't listen to their cool. I will not leave this bed. I will not leave the salty floor. The moon is lonely; swims ahead. So spirit me away once more above the ice and cold. Silver bells tossed in the tide make a song of streams of gold. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-05-2002 12:55 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Make a song of streams of gold." This song sings, of tales untold, As words are read, the themes unfold --You are unique, you broke the mold! Linda |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Linda!Thanks.  Me |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Stated clearly from the restless heart. As always, exceptional. ThisDiamond |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
I just can't help it, I pictured someone trying to capture and hold a squirrel...and wondered, now how could anyone possible do that? Sorry, I suffer from a very overactive, yet damaged imagination.  all kidding aside, it was a very good reply to the challenge! Well done! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
ThisDiamond, thank you for the kind words on this poem and my writing. Dulcinea, hey, aren't you the person who Don Quixote fell in love with? Well, a madman and a madwoman go together well. Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sometimes a madman and a madwomen simply create intolerable madness! dunno about that, but loved the poem...why does it have a "BEAT" generation feel to me? hmmm...gonna go re read....interesting...and drat you, ALWAYS MAKING ME THINK! love to you. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sometimes I think I write just to push thoughts away, so I won't think them. Of course, to write them, I must have thought them.  Mikey |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang Mike!! This is SO well done! Enjoyed the fell of this. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Nancy. I love yr words more than you can know. Mikey |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I liked this, Mike...you can't be held down, ya know...you fly! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Martie. That's sweet of you to say. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) now who is showing off? ( just kidding) very nicely done..as usual the structure and use of words adding to the feel and the color.... I do enjoy your words...always make me think and wonder what else lies hidden in them |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Cpat. What's hiding in my words? Just sadness and happiness grappling with each other until they fall sweaty and spent to either side of the line, as usual. Mike |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think you should go back to your very first post here and look at it. You have grown so much as a writer while you've been here. It's a joy to read you Mike!  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Sharon. That really lightens my heart today.From Housedown to Hold me down. Uh oh, more similarities than I thought. Thanks again ... E-mail me, k? We need to set up another Open Mic Night Refuge.Mikey P.S. I love your words, too -- and glad to see that your block is ending in dribs and drabs. -m. |
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