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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-09-05 09:38 AM

"Deep in the heart of.....,
downsize to a county,
to five (occupied)
bedrooms and a pool,

Vous mentez
je souffre

detached garage, a dog,
and two cats. Shrink
to an apartment, a
parking lot,
one dead fish,

Vous cueillez
je decouvre

endless Sun, bleached
prairie. Deforest then
whittle down rights,
shave pride,
husk money,
dwindle time.

Vous punissez
j'espere

Seeming respite in
a tale of the Moon,
moistened patch, brown
eyes. Carve on
the heart.

Tu geles
j'eteins

Each door smaller,
shrivel to a corner,
morph aphasic.
Vengeful greedy eyes
mirror none cowered.

Tu prend
je pars

The cord of my bolas
tightened to
adequacy
for its heavy load.

j'ecrirai

Fin?
Translation;
You lie
I suffer

You gather
I unmask

You punish
I hope

You freeze
I extinguish

You take
I leave

I will write

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-09-05 09:46 AM

very nicely done.... very nice indeed.

sometime it is in the writing that we are able to wrap some sanity around all that is in us....

I enjoyed

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2002-09-05 09:50 AM

Very interesting, and deserving of another read. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2002-09-05 09:56 AM

RSWells
Well done, enjoyed.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-09-05 10:04 AM

In writing
you rend

Excellent.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2002-09-05 10:13 AM

Richard

Could almost be two poems, the translation seemed so complete in itself. Keep writing no matter your space!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-09-05 10:16 AM

J'espere que vous ecriverez encore!---What I hope I'm is that, "I hope you that you will write again!" The older I get, the less I remember of the French I learned in highschool!

I have to tell you, I truly was affected my this piece. I can identify with what you are talking about. You have expressed it so well, there's no need for me to!

Linda

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2002-09-05 10:31 AM

RSWells~
The title drew me in ...
the content kept me~

In spite of the ephemerality of it all ...
a message that stays with this reader~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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