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Time's River (LilTai's lil challenge)
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Time's River (LilTai's lil challenge) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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If time is a river, it must be a river of rocks. The cascade of colored stones upon the current's muddy flow. The way they tick against themselves and talk to lowest reaches. Eyes without sight or sun, faceless faces facing me. If time is a river, it must be a river of petals. The brocade untwine of their colors, swimming braid-lines from the shore. Snakes of mingled water pollen floating face down for the fallen, brightening the dam's edge nearest where I sit and watch them go. If time is a river, it must be a river of paper. White edges and faceless faces to water, mud, unburdened stone. Watch the words flow to their ingress, egressed backward to the sun. To find and hold the cherish of dawn and meet the night's colors head on. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-04-2002 06:28 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
again... the imagery is strong,fresh... and enjoyable to read. Nicely penned.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."To find and hold the cherish of dawn and meet the night's colours (whoops! that's the Canadian way of spelling it!) colors head on." "To find and hold the cherish of dawn and meet the night's colors head on"... Beared repeating! Linda |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Ron and Linda.  Mike |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Ahh, found it I love it!!!! The imagery and all of the ideas flow perfectly...this is really great Thank you!! and sorry i missed it the first time Tai |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you enjoyed, Tai. |
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