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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-09-04 08:29 AM

The rains have returned,
After summer holiday
Of grasses brown burned,
Reservoirs almost empty,
And dusty long days.
The nights begin cooling down
As green spreads across the ground.

Trees drink the sky tears
As warm play ends for children,
Hair cuts and clean ears
They return to class again
To harvest learning
From ancient books and teachers
As the year turns in colors.

Skies are softer grays,
Crystal blue and clouds fluff white,
Skies of shorter days
That rush quicker into night
Over color change
Trees tinge with yellow and red
Preparing colorful shed.

The rains have returned,
As warm play ends for children,
Skies of shorter days.

Gloom

This is a format found in my research,
which I’m not sure is an actual format and I don’t seem to find a name for it,
but it recurs often with minor variations.
Choka stanzas ending in a Haiku made from each stanza.
This poem would be a single, but three more Chokas and another Haiku could be added.
Actual lengths of the Chokas doesn’t seem to matter (I picked all mine of seven lines),
Just the theme should be about one subject.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-09-04 08:36 AM

Professor Gloom---Masterfully done! I'm going back now to read your words again!

Linda

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2002-09-04 09:11 AM

Thank you, Earth Angel,
Pleased you enjoyed, I have been working on my web site,
So you might wish to check that out.
Alternate forms has a Japanese form section .

Gloom

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-09-04 09:14 AM

Fantastic write Gloom...
Enjoyed this format so much!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2002-09-04 09:54 AM

Prof. Gloom - this is very unique and enjoyable. Nicely done indeed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2002-09-04 10:17 AM

dearest dark one...your shadows crawl to places beautiful...helen

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2002-09-04 10:21 AM

Professor

Felt in rhythm, almost like a song. Lovely!

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

7 posted 2002-09-04 10:30 AM

Thank you, Enchantress,
Pleased you liked it, just something I found will scanning poetry
From other sources, looking for a touch of inspiration.

Thank you, Nightshade,
Glad you liked my humble words.

Thank you, 1slick_lady,
A shadow can creep anywhere, it’s the noticing that matters.
Pleased you enjoyed my sight.

Thank you, Martie,
I couldn’t tell by the references, but it might be a song style,
Especially the multiples.
Your words are insightful and kind.

Gloom

Magicmystery
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since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2002-09-04 12:41 PM

a very intereting read indeed. And a familiar topic too. Got one buzzing around inside my head from 22 years ago... gonna post it soon... when I can remember it all. Thanks for the reminder.

Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

9 posted 2002-09-04 01:21 PM

Skies are softer grays,
Crystal blue and clouds fluff white,
Skies of shorter days
That rush quicker into night
Over color change
Trees tinge with yellow and red
Preparing colorful shed.

Being a sky watcher I enjoyed this very much. I've painted many skies and have yet to capture the beauty God creates with a simple brush stroke of nature. Love this poem Gloomy

The White Rose~
A simple expression
of classic beauty.

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

10 posted 2002-09-04 01:21 PM

oh this is so the right poem for me to read tonight, am going back to school tommorow, anyway never mind I really enjoyed this, thankyou,
anya

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