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Who knows what 's deep inside me??
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Who knows what 's deep inside me?? |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
Who knows what's deep inside me.. Who knows what I feel... Who knows what I am thinking about... Every single day brought new events.. The love that I kept in my soul start winding,, and winding... Like a lonely rose in a green garden... Who knows what's deep inside me.. The heart is holding the furious waves... The soul needs the love and the kindness.. Who knows what's deep inside me.. The conscience wonders how this love will end if the flames will stop burning... The heart is wondering if he will extinguish longing agony's flame... The four seasons have gone and I am here.. Like a lonely rose.. Waiting for the sunshine... And who knows what's deep inside me.. Secretlife, (Easy come,,Easy go) [This message has been edited by secretlife (09-05-2002 12:02 PM).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Who knows what's deep inside me.. Who knows what I feel... Who knows what I am thinking about... Every single day brought new events.. The love that I kept in my soul start winding, and winding (or do you mean whining?) like a lonely rose in a green garden... Who knows what's deep inside me.. The heart is holding the furious waves... The soul needs the love and the kindness.. Who knows what's deep inside me.. The conscience wonders how this love will end.. [did]{if} the flames will stop burning... The heart is wondering.. [how]{if} he will extinguish longing agony's flame... The four seasons have gone and I am here.. Like a lonely rose.. Waiting for the sunshine... And who knows what's deep inside me.. Secretlife, (Easy come, Easy go) Note: I've added some 's and an s here and there. If I have put [] around something it's a suggestion to remove that and the {} around something is a suggested addition. This is in answer to your "pllz" above in your request for critiques. Take what words for you and toss the rest. I like the stream of consciousness style of your ponderings. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Who knows..."---We will!--as you share yourself with others through your wonderful writing. Linda |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
No one knows unless you speak Or through your poetic lines It leaks.. Big hugs Tammy |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
The four seasons have gone and I am here.. Like a lonely rose.. Waiting for the sunshine... And who knows what deep inside me.. I love this. The image of the lonely rose. Superb!! The White Rose~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, know you are loved by many and that the four seasons are bound to keep bringing you true loves blessings! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
Thanx dear VAS very much for your correction...I added what you advised me...I hope that my words is ready now....Thanx alot... Thanx for every one for reading mine I am really glade to hear your opinions.... Thanx alot,,, Secretlife, (Easy come,,Easy go) |
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