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ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

0 posted 2002-09-03 07:16 PM

                Internal Rain

     An inlaid fire pillages and ravishes
     Guides the soul to the river Styx.
     Self lambasting, bastardizes the core -
     A shiny penny turned dull from use.

     Unebbing guilt washes, never cleansing
     But dampening & circumscribing all good intentions.
     Self apology never accepted, reflux denied.
     An effusion of unanswerable queries.

     One's wealth measured in layers of doubt-
     out of reach, the olive branch beckons.
     When will the pacification of worth
         sew
          me
           a
        raincoat?

(C) 2001 Picasso Lyrics

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-09-03 07:24 PM

When...

When your heart begins to love it's
beholder....

When you forgive the giver...

For in your heart, your soul, a man...
good...great...lives...and forgives...

Excellent write Jeff, thank you...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-09-03 07:29 PM

Jeff your writing ability and vocab amaze me!
So, so, many times I am left speechless by your work.
I especially love the last stanza...
*Nancy sits in awe shaking her head..smiling*
~Hugs to you poet sir~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2002-09-03 09:55 PM

Unebbing guilt washes, never cleansing
     But dampening & circumscribing all good intentions.
     Self apology never accepted, reflux denied.
     An effusion of unanswerable queries.

Wow... I recognize this feeling, Jeff...
and You write it so very well.

~ hugs from the Munkster
Thanks for sharing

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Tammy Blessing
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 366
PA

4 posted 2002-09-03 10:00 PM

One's wealth measured in layers of doubt-
     out of reach, the olive branch beckons.
     When will the pacification of worth
         sew
          me
           a
        raincoat?
When you realize the beauty within..when you accept "Life's Journey" and make it your own..When you know that you are loved..and you are..
**frantically sewing a raincoat**
Peace,love,light and happiness
Tammy

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-09-03 10:21 PM

(sigh) Wow, oh my gosh, your words always amaze me, your wisdom is far beyond your years, this remninded me of the Greek myth of Tantalus, who was punished for a crime of theft and for his punishment he always tried reaching for that olive branch but every time he reached it always drew away from him forever! (big hugggsssss) I guess I see forgiveness this way, if one cannot be so hard on oneself and sincerely forgive it'll always be back to Step 1 but otherwise we will finally be gifted! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2002-09-03 10:31 PM

Jeff

Self, say I...listen to my soul...it is full of courage with a question, yet nagged by self doubt...yet, all around the white sheats of light play in the breeze. The quest is too hard, the breeze says...like a rock stubbed to toe. You are a good person..I see it so simply yet so profoundly in your words.

[This message has been edited by Martie (09-03-2002 10:32 PM).]

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

7 posted 2002-09-04 09:42 PM

Can't believe I missed this on the first go through. You are a caring soul Jeff. I can see that in your writing, and in your face. It's written in your smile and in your eyes. Wonderful write!

The White Rose~
A simple expression
of classic beauty.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2002-09-04 09:54 PM

One's wealth measured in layers of doubt-
     out of reach, the olive branch beckons.
     When will the pacification of worth
         sew
          me
           a
        raincoat?

Now if I could just burn this on to my cd I would be singing along, but since I can't
could you play that song again please..
How fitting these words are Jeff....
each and every verse....

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