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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-09-03 06:17 PM



I whip stitch sclera
of the sky.
It's raining gathered glass
again.
Suspended wine-scent, pressing
rose.
A fragrant oil ghost,
the road.

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2002-09-03 07:11 PM


Mike, you have wonderful way with words!

Linda

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2 posted 2002-09-03 07:16 PM


Thank you, Linda.

I wanted to whip-stitch two like verses together, to create something new.

I'm glad you enjoyed.  

Mike

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-03-2002 07:33 PM).]

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3 posted 2002-09-03 07:24 PM


Very very clever Mikey!!
Enjoyed much!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-09-03 07:34 PM


Thanks, Nancy.

Mike

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5 posted 2002-09-03 08:40 PM


I like the scented oil of the road.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2002-09-03 08:44 PM


I like it...when are we gonna do an Open Mic night Mikey!!!!?????
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7 posted 2002-09-03 09:16 PM


Great stitching here, Mr.Squirrel...
~ hugs from a rodent of a different stripe

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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8 posted 2002-09-03 09:51 PM


Mike

You caught me with my dictionary...with your fresh originality.  Good stuff!

Tammy Blessing
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9 posted 2002-09-03 09:55 PM


Nice stiching here.
Peace,love,light and happiness
Tammy

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10 posted 2002-09-03 10:52 PM


Kethry,
Thank you...

Sharon, I'm ready when you are.

Lyra, thank you for enjoying the threads.

Martie, the only reason I know the word sclera is because I've had my eyes operated on before ... and, actually, an ex-girlfriend taught the word to me, too, when I forgot it the first time.

Tammy, thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed.

Mike

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11 posted 2002-09-04 01:47 AM


"witch sip?"
oh no
witch stip(ulation)
(ululation)

dude, you have been using
"oil"
in poems lately
and each time
it srikes me
that word is pregnant
I doan no nuthin bout birthin babies
Miz scarlett!
ah jeez
needing to go to bed====
brian

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12 posted 2002-09-04 03:49 AM


hmmm...."witch sip" seems to have proved a more difficult challenge...at least for the night...

truly tho, you and Kari, get the idea of the challenge...in joining of two thoughts to create a whole...

Thank you Mikie. I go out there in the world and come home home feeling like an alien--until I come HERE. chuckle...and yes, I mean that as compliment.


yer gorgeous, and this is a sand painting.

Zall
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13 posted 2002-09-04 04:44 AM


Some good metaphores here,

Good work

bsquirrel
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14 posted 2002-09-04 12:19 PM


brian,
I can answer that one. When it first rains in Southern California, all the imbedded dirt and oil of the freeways rises up to the surface, making the roads treacherously slippery (that's in an old, old poem of mine, called rain stones, which includes the line "Glass and lost purchase").

I want rain!!!

Serenity, witch sip, hm? Now THERE'S a challenge! I'm gonna try it! (and i know what you mean)

Zall, thanks!

Mike

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