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. . . I touch your core . . .
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. . . I touch your core . . . |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
the center of you is no doubt an hallowed place where your core is touched that I be allowed inside gives rise to the explosion Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (09-03-2002 02:18 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hmmm! "Explosion" you say?!?*** Earthy Angel |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I think I understand the intent of this and it's a powerful motivation...I do have trouble getting from the 3rd to the 5th line. I don't know if I'm trying to put in punctuation that doesn't really need to be there, or if some does and I can't figure out just where. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A hot temper? Is this what you are touching inside of that hallowed place?  ~ hallowed hugsLyra |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Earth Angel ~ Thanx for the read  Virginia ~ I seldom, if ever, use punctuation in my work. That way you can read it as you like. Maybe you will read it as I intended Lyra ~ Could be Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (09-03-2002 02:39 PM).] |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
I think this one has got lots of meanings that aren’t on the surface, and you best be careful how you touch those cores, or the explosion will not be the one you desire. |
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Lady Ollyne Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 337East Coast |
I read this completely different, almost meant for the adult forum  Lady O |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Blue Kitty ~ Yes, there are many meanings ... depending upon what one reads into it Lady Ollyne ~ If that's what you read into it ... then that's fine Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (09-03-2002 02:45 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Even when I close my eyes the light that was you burns against my lids. ~So pleased to see you here Interloper ~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
in awe of your words my heart begs me to read on glimpsing your sweet soul Interloper - you are amazing!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Interloper, I see you used all your punctuation in the title. It does halt without it, but open-endedly..M.i.k.e. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooo beautiful, I love it, I have missed your words so much and as always your beautiful tankas touch the heart right to the core! (big huggssssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is a great poem sir.....it leaves much open to wonder what you are touching..... Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bob darling heart see how quickly I scamper back to sit beside you and drink you in. Just when I believe you have spun all the magic you possibly can you do it again and I’m left wondering at the apparent ease you have in crafting something so wonderful. I love this darling heart utterly utterly love it, have you any concept how special your writing is to me? Always I read it and ALWAYS, But ALWAYS I marvel at how wonderfully your words flow. Lyrical and poetically dancing down the page to pirouette in perfect steps of splendour. And this is utterly utterly wonderful, the way I read it is I hope the way you wrote it, and its perfect, warming, passionate and very well written   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Nancy ~ Whoa! what a wonderful place to be remembered ... in your eyes Chris ~ How can I tell you how happy I am to hear form you dear friend. You could damn my work and I'd have a GR8 big smile for you bsquirrel ~ You discovered my secret Noah ~ I've missed your upbeat comments and work, too. Thank you my friend. Lauren ~ Just let your mind take it in and let it say what you want Magnificent One ~ What can I say except you melt my heart with every word. Talk to you in Florida, sweet Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
do not burst alone I long to share this pleasure neither right nor left establishment of middle my center of attention |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hey Doc, welcome back. I see your sabbatical has done the physician heal thyself thing. This could be a tower if it wasn't so short...in fact I'm not sure it isn't with all the hidden layers. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Dang! What a tanka! You do these sooooo well! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You touch so many with your well thought out, well constructed haikus and senryus... it's good to have you back! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Helen ~ That is beautiful. Please post it Keth ~ Thank you, m'lady Melissa ~ You are so sweet ... like honey Sunshine ~ Thank you sweet lady Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
G-a-s-p. Scintillating! Admiring you at Passions. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Interloper Good to see you...seems like it has been awhile. To be allowed in to a hallowed place is very special, with trust to not do harm. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BrightStar ~ Thank you. Martie ~ Now, you just may have gotten to the core of the whole idea Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Nan would have erased most of this and then sent the rest to the adult forum if I'd written it.....Where's justice?....LOL...good write...makes the mind travel all over the place.... |
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