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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2002-09-02 10:40 PM



Shoes off, impulsively the tickling of toes on soft grasses
Wandering among the changing guard as summer passes
As if by sentience the remainder will become more vivid
Until the step upon the thorns to interruptions livid

Shoes off, to rub away the painful sting of insurrection
Wondering if somehow now prelude a mere infection
As if the only memory would come about the deepest pain
Until the step into the meadow where remade the petals rain

Shoes off, never to be worn again within the petal path
Wandering among the fallen flowers in the stormy aftermath
As if by chance the eminent of dreams could reappear
Until the step without a doubt moves musically to bring you here

Shoes off, shoes off and lost in toss upon the distant briar snare
Wondering the moments passing softly in the muted colors there
As if the never ending story writes itself before my very eyes
Until the step upon the softly fallen, did I think myself so wise?

Copyright Kkh 9/2/02

[This message has been edited by ThisDiamond (09-02-2002 10:41 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-09-02 10:44 PM


I love it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-09-02 10:44 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, this is a powerfully introspective write, I know how you feel as the seasons may change so drastically along with its reasons but truly you are filled with wisdom and again you will be able to walk barefoot because summer will always come and go like every season! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kathleen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2002-09-02 11:25 PM


Shoes off, never to be worn again within the petal path
Wandering among the fallen flowers in the stormy aftermath
As if by chance the eminent of dreams could reappear
Until the step without a doubt moves musically to bring you here

This is an absolutely gorgeous write, Kathy...
I love the repitition of the "shoes off" as well as the beautiful imagery all the way though
~ hugs from a barefoot chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

WhiteRose
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4 posted 2002-09-03 10:15 AM


This is beautiful. Enjoyed it with my shoes off.
Martie
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5 posted 2002-09-03 01:36 PM


ThisDiamond

A fantastic poem in all ways and most sincerely enjoyed.

Blue Kitty
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6 posted 2002-09-03 01:40 PM


I love this, probably because I love to walk barefoot.  I usually do it in the sand not in the grass, but both are good places, grass tickles your toes if it’s too long, maybe even your ankles.


VAS
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7 posted 2002-09-03 02:34 PM


How do you do it? Such vivid imagery within a piece that is very ethereal to me. Practically everyone is boggling my mind today. Do I need to go eat some fish? You know, brain food.

I know I would love dancing upon petals in bare feet and would dread the thorns as well.

Maybe the ethereal is brought about by the dream weaving imagery. Oh, my, lovely thoughts that collide with a feathery fuzziness in my head. It's not even Monday!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2002-09-03 03:38 PM


Thanks you guys!

You always make me smile, and see into my work with new eyes. Thank you for always giving me a warmer vision. ThisDiamond

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9 posted 2002-09-03 04:23 PM


Kathy,  in my old age,  words sometimes
require repetetive viewing to comprehend
what has been masterfully penned by a
gifted lady...

I sense an emergence of a new woman....one
who has taken off the shoes and now walks
a path...a treasured path,  easily and
without fear...having thrown away the things
that keep her from becoming in touch with
what she is experiencing...

Mayhaps I am wrong,  mayhaps not...

Either way,  it is a beautifully written
poem of feelings...

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-09-03 05:33 PM


ThisDiamond,
This poem is beyond critique.
It's the sky after rain.

Mike

Kethry
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11 posted 2002-09-03 05:45 PM


Wonderful images of freedom and the pain of casting aside that which would hinder us.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Doug Pretorius
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12 posted 2002-09-03 05:50 PM


Wow! This is a great!
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