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jellybeans
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0 posted 2002-08-28 12:06 PM


In your words the melody of the Siren’s song
draws me near. I feel the danger and would say
no and hang up the phone, but my hands
have a will of their own.

The waves smash me into the rocks buffeting
my fate into no other choice. My destination
is at hand, until suddenly revelation breaks

the spell-a hero’s applause sounds as I plot
my new course-leaving but the sound of my tail
wind on your answering machine.


[This message has been edited by jellybeans (08-28-2002 01:44 PM).]

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suthern
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1 posted 2002-08-28 12:56 PM


I love those last lines... what a fantastic image! *G*

Sometimes... the need to hear a voice is greater than the need to act wisely. *S* Well written!

the_loner_23
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2 posted 2002-08-28 12:57 PM


Very good

Cold hands means a warm heart

bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-08-28 01:01 PM


jellybeans,
I, too, love the ending -- not to mention the build-up to the end. If you're extremely bored, pop over to the search function and find "Siren song" by me. In a way, they're completely differently, but I just thought you'd like to see how others deal with the Sirens.

Mike

jellybeans
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4 posted 2002-08-28 02:32 PM


suthern, you paraphrased it perfectly....thank you lady

loner..thanks for stopping by

bsquirrel...thank you...and yep I will go look up your poem....in fact I think I remember reading it, but any of yours are always worth more than one read

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