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Notches in Time : A Gloom Sonnet

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Professor Gloom
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of Depression


0 posted 08-27-2002 07:06 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Depression was her fastest friend of all,
When no one else was there it came to call,
Rushing to greet her with so many thoughts,
Pain, agony and self doubt always brought.

Not too deep, just enough to bring on sleep.

Obsession of lack of being perfect,
Too slight and being insignificant,
She binds herself tight in preparation
Bliss, fantasy and a brief elation.

Not too much, just waking sleep is enough.

Distortion of everything about her,
The comfort of living a constant blur,
Perfection drifts off with reality,
Notching her arm causing her not to be.

Gloom

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WhiteRose
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1 posted 08-27-2002 08:23 AM       View Profile for WhiteRose   Email WhiteRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhiteRose

Depression was her fastest friend of all,
When no one else was there it came to call,
Rushing to greet her with so many thoughts,
Pain, agony and self doubt always brought.


I had much more highlighted, like the whole poem actually. But I thought these lines the ones that spoke to me the loudest. You described depression well. A malady I suffered greatly in my youth. Nicely done Gloomy!

Touch me with your whispers,
and I'll listen with my heart.

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 08-27-2002 08:29 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, WhiteRose,
Also a part of my youth, in my old age I have progressed to Gloom,
Pleased you enjoyed

Gloom
Zinsser
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3 posted 08-27-2002 10:19 AM       View Profile for Zinsser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zinsser

Hey... who told you that you could write about me  LOL   : )

Connie
Professor Gloom
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4 posted 08-27-2002 10:47 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, Zinsser,
I was just gazing into my seeing pool of black,
Looking in to see what was looking back,
I didnít remember if it was a spell I cast
When I was looking into your past.

Gloom
Zinsser
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5 posted 08-27-2002 10:53 AM       View Profile for Zinsser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zinsser

That is almost creepy in a hauntingly beautiful kind of way  LOL
ok how sick does that sound  LOL
passing shadows
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6 posted 08-30-2002 11:29 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I can see me here
VAS
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7 posted 09-01-2002 09:31 PM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

I could see me so clearly right up to the part about being able to sleep to stop it.

At least being with others can allay it for awhile.

btw, did you see the one I wrote to you? I'm wondering if you didn't see it or if I offended you in some way, I hope not, but there go those doubts again.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Paul Wilson
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Between Fantasy and Reality


8 posted 09-02-2002 03:29 AM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Gloom...Very serious thoughts here.
Sleep seems to bring comfort till again we wake...Paul
Zall
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9 posted 09-02-2002 08:00 AM       View Profile for Zall   Email Zall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Zall's Home Page   View IP for Zall

hmmm,

i like this one,

Zall
miscellanea
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10 posted 05-12-2005 08:46 AM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

I believe I know aerson much like this!  I love your sensitivity, Professor.  You are a very unique individual who I'm glad to meet through his writing.

     miscellanea

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (05-12-2005 12:13 PM).]

 
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