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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2002-08-27 01:28 AM





Ask around the people who you find
what life would bring to ones their kind
if they had one wish to be granted
what would it be?

the result of wishes you ask
completes a blue angel's task
it grants half-terrestrial wishes
on condition that double is granted others
recorded in live sound on platinum dishes

an uncanny wish prompt the clever
to accept blindness in one eye
where sight is never
that they may rule over human kind
which would then be doubly blind.

settle for 'half-sighted' instead of 'half-witted'
settle for light and dark distinctions
rather than total visual darkness?
better a blurry focus on neat perspectives
than the blindness of surround sound
taken for granted...ask around the people you find
the visions of life harboured in mind.




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (08-27-2002 10:58 AM).]

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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
1 posted 2002-08-27 01:38 AM


some interesting lines, but I'm afraid I'm too sleepy right now to catch the message of this piece. Guess I'll have to check back.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
2 posted 2002-08-27 10:42 AM


Poetic version of a French tale relating the story of a vagabond who approaches an angel to relieve his misery on the condition that
if he wishes for something, all of humanity must recieve double that.


Miah
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since 2002-08-26
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Pennsylvania
3 posted 2002-09-25 09:12 PM


Glad I found this.  Very enjoyable read.
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
4 posted 2002-09-26 06:03 PM


Standing Ovation...will read again and again!
ThisDiamond

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