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Martie
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0 posted 2002-08-23 11:14 PM



        How Could I

How could I leave you at the back door
your tall frame raining the way it does
across my window
where inside all my pretty pieces are coming undone

You left your number to the dance
on the card that I was sure I had lost long ago

And now I am smoking again
on something I let burn down to the nub
so I could feel the burn
and that was years ago
in the flavor of lemonade and dare

on meditation’s still
I balance

The smaller you get
the bigger you become
all blown up and exploding inside me
as if your color could change the baize of me

into delight
so says the orb of light left on
as the grass yields to the park bench

how could I not




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1 posted 2002-08-23 11:18 PM


"The smaller you get
the bigger you become
all blown up and exploding inside me
as if your color could change the baize of me

into delight
so says the orb of light left on
as the grass yields to the park bench

how could I not"




(smiles) Oh Martie, this is excellent, I always love how you bring such grace to the smallest and simplest things and make it larger than life in poetry! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-08-23 11:25 PM


How could I leave you at the back door
your tall frame raining the way it does
across my window
where inside all my pretty pieces are coming undone
--------------------------------------------
Shaking my head and whispering, "Oh Martie!"
Some day maybe I will learn how to write like this....perhaps.
Exquisite dear lady.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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3 posted 2002-08-23 11:30 PM


You left your number to the dance
on the card that I was sure I had lost long ago

And now I am smoking again
on something I let burn down to the nub
so I could feel the burn
and that was years ago
in the flavor of lemonade and dare

Oh yes, Martie... I have to agree with Nancy.
No one can combine words the way you do...
When I try to do that, it just doesn't work, but for you...
well, your poetry speaks for itself.
~ lots of hugs ~
I loved this

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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4 posted 2002-08-23 11:48 PM


Martie, I am in awe, your imagery is always  outstanding! The words flow, and from unique emotional moments only you could capture.
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5 posted 2002-08-24 08:49 AM


Martie,

Yes, every phase is a gem. Your writing is very special. I agree with each of the comments written, could not have said it any better. I can only say, "write on, write on"

Electra

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6 posted 2002-08-24 08:58 AM



I see you have garnered
a new admirer in SimplyGold...

she hasn't seen anything yet,
has she...

I must let her know...she shall soon
be Martiesque'd as are we all...

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7 posted 2002-08-24 09:48 AM


Martie,
You are unique in your style.

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8 posted 2002-08-24 09:52 AM


Martie - Excellent write - you amaze me. You express yourself with such grace and ease. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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9 posted 2002-08-24 10:27 AM


Noah--It's all the small things that ARE important.  I'm so glad that you see that..and thank you.

Nancy--You do write exquisite!

Lyra--You have the most beautiful and honest way of writing...I treasure every word.  Hugs!

Midnite--I appreciate the way you reply...always just perfect.

electra--Thank you so much!  I will if you will...write on!

Karilea--You're so cute!

Sy--People always say I'm a bit odd...I like unique much better.  

Chris--a lovely comment, for that I thank you.


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10 posted 2002-08-24 10:59 AM


Yes Martie...you are unique....and that is
just the way I want you to stay....that and
your unique style and touch to poetry....

Keep them as they are...

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11 posted 2002-08-24 11:10 AM


Martie:
Another higher star that I aspire to my friend. Exceptional write. ThisDiamond

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12 posted 2002-08-24 12:26 PM


SweetSis~
How indeed !
You walk the words along a path I long to follow~
Thank you gal~
Have a happy !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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13 posted 2002-08-26 11:59 AM


Martie - I love the way your poems move into my soul and paint pictures and evoke thoughts from my mind - the images you weave are something else - loved this - Paul
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14 posted 2002-09-16 12:05 PM


wow Martie, I'm not even sure what to say, so many good lines, and a fantastic ending! WOW!
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15 posted 2002-09-16 04:49 PM


I love it when you write like this.  SOOO well done, Martie, simply gorgeous.   *hugs* sweetie
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16 posted 2002-09-16 08:13 PM


Great work Martie....Enjoyed very much!

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17 posted 2002-09-17 10:53 AM


The smaller you get
the bigger you become
all blown up and exploding inside me
as if your color could change the baize of me


nicely done..these lines in particular struck me... I enjoyed as usual, and your talent always amazes me..

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