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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-08-23 12:54 PM


Oh, but to touch that brighter star
there, shining in a far off galaxy
    distant in the future.
If I could reach past that source of your pain
and sprinkle stardust that has floated down
from the heavens and blow it     gently
across the trails that you walk
in hopes that                  perhaps
tomorrow your steps could fall         lighter
so that you    might tread                softer
upon that path                within.

I would fly straight through the heavens
holding your hand
to make all of your dreams        come true.

Dance!  Oh how we would dance
and the Gods in celestial skies
would be jealous
when Luna shone her light
upon two souls              held
in harmonies delight.


There are stars
millions
in the universe
but yours....
yours shines brighter
than those that just         hang there
clinging........to the darkness.

(c)dmsmith 08-23-02



{because I love you....}
If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream....

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-23-2002 05:12 PM).]

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WhiteRose
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1 posted 2002-08-23 12:56 PM


This is beautiful Donna.
Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2002-08-23 12:59 PM


T’is very true,
These words coming from you,
That stars shining with brightness
Are brightened by the darkness
In which they are found
Scattered around.

Very interesting
Piece

Gloom

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3 posted 2002-08-23 01:42 PM


GentleSpirit~

'There are stars
millions
in the universe
but yours....
yours shines brighter
than those that just hang there
clinging........to the darkness.'


Such original, lovely thoughts~
You always 'touch'~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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NewEnglandlazurlu
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4 posted 2002-08-23 01:45 PM


GentleSpirit, I enjoyed this so much, as with all your writings. This one particularly though, touched my heart in a special place.

Hugs, Marti

"Even if life is full of thorns,
I still embrace it, for I know
that in between those thorns,
there is a rose worth all the pain."

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5 posted 2002-08-23 02:11 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, I love it, just the thought of touching a star of my dreams with my Joanna made me smile as such innocent grace fills your heart! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-08-23 03:42 PM


Gentle Spirit
A lovely tender gentle write, enjoyed.

Enchantress
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7 posted 2002-08-23 04:05 PM


There are stars
millions
in the universe
but yours....
yours shines brighter
than those that just         hang there
clinging........to the darkness.
-----------------------------------------

Donna, this has to be my favourite from you now!!
This is outstanding writing...
Oh my how I love this piece...
You have penned a
Wonderful!!  
~Hugs~

Bill Charles
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8 posted 2002-08-23 04:10 PM


Gentle Spirit - love the gentleness and warthm of this, and love the stardust sprinkled touching...

BC

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2002-08-23 04:54 PM


Rose, thank you.  I appreciate it.

Gloom, thank you.

Marge, glad you enjoyed the lovely thoughts I
hold in pen.  Hugs.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2002-08-23 04:55 PM


Marti, it pleases me much that this touched your heart.

Noah, may all of yours and Joannas dreams come true.  Hugs.

Sey, thanks and glad you enjoyed.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2002-08-23 04:57 PM


Nancy you are too good to me.  Thank you so much
sweet lady you.

Bill, seems sometimes the stardust adds the magic touch.  Thank you.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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12 posted 2002-08-23 06:40 PM


nice
Nightshade
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13 posted 2002-08-23 07:43 PM


If I could reach past that source of your pain
and sprinkle stardust that has floated down
from the heavens and blow it     gently
across the trails that you walk
in hopes that                  perhaps
tomorrow your steps could fall         lighter
Donna - This is a wonderful, piece of work. I love it!! Chris

Martie
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14 posted 2002-08-24 12:09 PM


Donna

Sometimes love makes it happen...this is certainly a loving poem.  Hugs!

Madame Chipmunk
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15 posted 2002-08-24 12:13 PM


Love is beautiful, Donna...
and you write of it so very well...
~ lots of hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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16 posted 2002-08-24 01:24 PM


Mom, I know that this made Bill smile.  
Gentle Spirit
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17 posted 2002-08-24 01:31 PM


hey you......you snuck in there on me.....
  also.......

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18 posted 2002-08-24 02:02 PM


I've often wished I could touch people like this. Well done, Donna.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

sigheyes
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the winds of destiny
19 posted 2002-08-25 02:07 PM


I would fly straight through the heavens
                    holding your hand
                    to make all of your dreams        come true.

Sometimes I wonder if you know how much your love shows in your words
and if he knows how lucky he is. May you both be blessed in love.

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20 posted 2002-08-25 10:19 PM


this is the best that I've read from you D. . . it's a testament to just how far you've come. . .

beautiful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Gentle Spirit
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21 posted 2002-08-26 09:22 AM


Elizabeth I believe that each person holds beauty in their
own words and I have seen this beauty in your words as well.
I thank you for such a lovely comment.

SE, gal you do know how to touch, and I thank you.

Wow Sven, I am honored at your words.  I believe the how far I have come isn't just my poetry......but in my life also.
Thank you so very much dear man.  Hugs.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Sunshine
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22 posted 2002-08-26 11:55 AM



A gentle, bright touch, indeed....

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23 posted 2002-08-26 10:10 PM


This tickles ones heart and leaves a soft dust that lingers, oh how lovely this was!

The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it.
Sharon    

powerofthysword
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24 posted 2002-08-27 12:02 PM


Very enlightening and enchanting poem Gentle Spirit, I was struck with awe as I read it over and over again.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

Honeybee
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25 posted 2002-08-27 12:09 PM



Donna, this is so beautiful, and now I  have a favourite of yours, as this is your best to date.  I've read this 3 times already, and it keeps getting better and better. It's a keeper~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Suetang
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26 posted 2002-08-27 11:09 PM


Hello Donna

You have painted a masterpiece with your wonderful words.  I hope you are well.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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27 posted 2002-08-27 11:54 PM


very touching sweet lady..... always from you pen to our hearts....


Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

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