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Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

0 posted 2002-08-23 11:16 AM


“BEING WITH YOU”
by
Bill Charles
~~~~
I would walk with you
to heaven,
I would walk with you
to hell…
I would walk closer
and hold you,
I would walk to where
you dwell…

You could teach me love
in heaven,
You could teach me love
in hell…
You could teach me to
stay by your side,
You could teach me to not
leave and hide…

We once were always to
stay together,
We once were always to
never part…

Now you’re gone yet you still conquered,
Now you’re gone with this fragile heart…
~~~~

© Copyright 2002 Bill Charles - All Rights Reserved
VAS
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1 posted 2002-08-23 11:28 AM


that certainly is a 'hook, line, and sinker' falling

caveat...no one who loves you back would lead you to hell, though

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Gabriel Frost
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Between midnight thoughts
2 posted 2002-08-23 12:03 PM


Great write, i know the feeling of being left with only the big hole in your chest where your heart used to be.
Moonlight Romeo
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3 posted 2002-08-23 12:21 PM


Spoken like a true Romantic.  You know the song very well.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

WhiteRose
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4 posted 2002-08-23 12:21 PM


This is very sad Bill. Nicely written in all it sadness. A very touching piece.
Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-08-23 12:23 PM


Love your songs Bill...
You are such a romantic...oh yes.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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6 posted 2002-08-23 12:25 PM


HUgssssss MR Romance.....love how ya sing those blues...

Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

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7 posted 2002-08-23 11:24 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Bill, this is sooooo beautifully sad, sweet friend, I can't believe I missed this earlier, I'm so happy I found this sensitive compassionate ode! (sigh) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Kitty**
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8 posted 2002-08-23 11:37 PM


WOW !!! What love !!
Be thankful for it.
I enjoyed this very much.

Kitty

* That which gives light, must endure burning *

[This message has been edited by Kitty** (08-23-2002 11:38 PM).]

secretlife
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9 posted 2002-08-24 07:55 AM


What a very strong Love?? I really like the way you wrote it..Great thought??

                Good luck


Secretlife,
(Easy come,,Easy go)


Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2002-08-24 08:10 AM


Our heart are always so fragile when it comes to love. I liked the last line especially, sad but lovely
Liz

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11 posted 2002-08-24 09:55 AM


Awww Bill, your heart is on your sleeve in this one. Very nice. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

ThisDiamond
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12 posted 2002-08-24 11:13 AM


The author deserves applause...
Always to attain the highest blessings of love. This Diamond

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13 posted 2002-08-24 11:32 AM


This would make a good blues song....for you
sing it well...  

hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 2002-08-24 12:33 PM


Ah, BC...the heart never truly leaves, it just takes a well needed break sometimes to prepare for bigger and better things to come
Hugs

~ Ruth
  
  

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15 posted 2002-08-24 12:35 PM


Bill those of us who wear our hearts upon our sleeves often take the biggest falls.....but ya know.....when we finally get back up.....
we fly.....

Hugs to you poet friend.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

walker
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16 posted 2002-08-24 09:15 PM


Lovely!
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