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Blue Kitty
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0 posted 2002-08-21 09:09 AM


I love the feel of sand
Just where the ocean meets the land,
And shifts the gritty feeling
Under you as you stand
With a salty nose your senses reeling,
Roaring surf makes a noisy silence,
As gulls go sandwich stealing,
And children do the hot sand dance,
As I stand in foam ankle deep
And the sand between my toes seep
I watch the dolphins in the ocean play
Coming close then they drift away.
I dip my toes in the water when I can
I’d stay on the beach all the day
In the mixing zone of surf and sand.

P.


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Toerag
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Ala bam a
1 posted 2002-08-21 09:13 AM


This "Toe's" usually in hot water....liked the write...
Blue Kitty
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2 posted 2002-08-21 09:21 AM


Then you need a better place to dip them, nothing nicer than the salty breeze in your hair and the surf playing on your toes.  You do have hair don’t you?

P.

Toerag
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Ala bam a
3 posted 2002-08-21 09:27 AM


I have alot on my Toes?....Does that count?....Yea, I've still got hair, mine turned gray, not loose sweetie....
Blue Kitty
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4 posted 2002-08-21 09:32 AM


Hairy Toes, are they big too?  gray is alright, my daddy is getting gray so I don’t complain about the color.  Nice people have gray hair, but nice people can have no hair too.  
Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2002-08-21 09:48 AM


there is nothing like dipping your toes in the ocean.......thank you for a wonderful memory.  Hugs.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Blue Kitty
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6 posted 2002-08-21 09:57 AM


Oh, there’s nothing like it, I’m lucky to live close enough to walk to the beach, I spend all my extra time down there, which is never enough.
VAS
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7 posted 2002-08-21 09:57 AM



                        I love the feel of sand
                        Just where the ocean meets the land,
                        And shifts the gritty feeling
                        Under you as you stand
                        With a salty nose your senses reeling,
                        Roaring surf makes a noisy silence,
                        As gulls go sandwich stealing,
                        And children do the hot sand dance,
                        As I stand in foam ankle deep
                        And the sand between my toes seep
                        I watch the dolphins in the ocean play
                        Coming close then they drift away.
                        I dip my toes in the water when I can
                        I’d stay on the beach all the day
                        In the mixing zone of surf and sand.


Me, too, me, too!!!!! This was so much fun. I'm sitting here barefoot at the computer and I love everything about the trip to the beach you've included so masterfully here. The only nit I would pick is the line:

And the sand between my toes seep

I would say "sands" so your subj/predicate would agree and you could still keep your exact rhyme.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2002-08-21 10:00 AM


This is nicely done...

I like toeing the line too

Regards,Sudhir

Blue Kitty
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9 posted 2002-08-21 10:08 AM


I’m terrible  with those sort of things, I guess you are right, but I’m just happy to get all the words spelled ok.  I did get them spelt write didn’t eye, I used a spell checker on it.

I like to toe in a line in the sand every chance I get.

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-08-21 12:38 PM


I love the feeling where you walk right on the edge of the surf -- the way the sand is sort of smooth and joined like glass, but easy to break through -- to sink into.

If that makes sense.

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