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brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-08-21 12:54 PM

I know them.

There are not many,
but when they enter my life
I feel them.

They do not drive.
They do not jog.
Their hesitant steps
test my metal.
I am Atlas under the weight.

They drift,
barely stirring fog,
towards my center,
to my proudest point

They do not see me
for what I am.
They walk in symbolism.
Their honed eyes
see through my ruddy steel,
through ALL skin,
and search for the hidden meaning

I am vulnerable.
The choice I offer,
the temptation,
is the burden I must bear,
given by the gods who create.

Finding my heart
they stop
and lean against it.
Their deliberate grip
suffocating in it's
distracted intensity.

Looking down at the
cold churning abyss,
they study it's rhythm,
calculate it's soar,
probe the depths,
crave earth's core.

My cables thrum in protest,
deepest hum is noticed.
I call fresh wind
to chill the tears.
The cupping cold
raises their face.
Ahhh, yes!
Look at me!
Look at me,
child.
See in me
a different symbology.

I, too, have felt earthquakes.
Bent
under their rending upheavals,
but I stand
unbroken
always flexed for the next
grinding stone.

I offer you passage,
as I do all others.

But, I will join you
in the dance of this
radiant walk
off of my
sunrise suspension.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

[This message has been edited by brian sites (08-21-2002 01:47 AM).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-08-21 01:01 AM

Wonderful, especially these stanzas and btw, I'd love to dance of your sunrise suspension.

My cables thrum in protest,
deepest hum is noticed.
I call fresh wind
to chill the tears.
The cupping cold
raises their face.
Ahhh, yes!
Look at me!
Look at me,
child.
See in me
a different symbology.

I, too, have felt earthquakes.
Bent
under their rending upheavals,
but I stand
unbroken
always flexed for the next
grinding stone.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

2 posted 2002-08-21 01:14 AM

*smile*
thanks Virginia
A dance, eh?

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2002-08-21 01:41 AM

This was really vivid imagery, way too cool! I had to show you this as your poem reminded me of this bridge Nan and I drove over getting into Boston (we didn't know the name) but your poem also describes this beauty perfectly too. Really descriptive writing.

I took this hanging out her car window

The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it.
Sharon

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

4 posted 2002-08-21 01:46 AM

thank you, Mys
much appreciated
and a cool picture!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-08-21 03:32 AM

EXACTLY...just what I was typing about regarding archetypes, collective unconsious and? "so-called" signs...I say so called, because I think you know that to designate something a sign, is to give it some mysterious wisdom--and that is so not so...

there are visions in the foam, lovie.

amazing you.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-08-21 06:49 AM

Brian, this was a very good read! Thank you!

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

7 posted 2002-08-21 10:31 AM

thank you, Karen and Karilea
for the nice words

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2002-08-21 11:47 AM

Well...this is quite an accomplished write. Methinks that you have garnered a new "voice" with this.

It is truely, Stellar

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-08-21 11:54 AM

Glad you decided to lean over, but not walk off (though close, yes?).

Awesome write, brian.

Mike

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2002-08-21 12:03 PM

(smiles) Oh Brian, I feel such a powerful providence in these words, this is excellent, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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