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Standing Echo

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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind


0 posted 08-20-2002 08:56 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes

{My father would
wonder why,
as an infant
I'd cry so long
}

Remind me I am  the echo
         a window of time

standing at the edge of water

because I've grown so beautiful to you

in  shadows

      the forest

was    kept

I waited  in  darkness --
    for   loving arms
soft fingers to dry   tears
--
No stars tonight

   I weep for them

with one raindrop

   winter inched  between us
kept our inner light     from touch

Wild lilies  amidst seas of grass --
  our spirit  giving oceans blue    skies  
slipping    away  like changing weather

You will sleep many hours here
   trembling from  salt   --
your wounds  know   pain
building faith in a
ruined house  

touching fire and water
  ashes under my feet
footprints    fragile


{years have gone by}

I split your image --
how beautiful you were
my first encounter
          of times pictures

I wept for you
   I held   what remained
I felt    loss  and pain
come forth again    I learned
to let go   long before I loved


I flowered, a rose in the rain
you are a spirit, I still hear
  "do not cry,  everything will be alright"

reminding me I am the echo

fragile time

standing


The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-20-2002 10:41 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-20-2002 08:58 PM       View Profile for Krishankins   Email Krishankins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krishankins

Wonderful job! This has such a soft feel to it.

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

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2 posted 08-20-2002 09:03 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



"I wept for you
   I held   what remained
I felt    loss  and pain
come forth again    I learned
to let go   long before I loved


I flowered, a rose in the rain
you are a spirit, I still hear
  "do not cry,  everything will be alright"




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Lauren, this is so achingly beautiful, sweet friend, yes, everything will be alright and while when we're young that is hard to understand and difficult to believe time will ease all wounds! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (08-20-2002 09:05 PM).]

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Somewhere in time~


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I wept for you
   I held   what remained
I felt    loss  and pain
come forth again    I learned
to let go   long before I loved


I flowered, a rose in the rain
you are a spirit, I still hear
  "do not cry,  everything will be alright"

remind me I am the echo

fragile time

standing
=============================================
Sitting here shaking my head and whispering...'oh yes Lauren'.
Fantastic emotional write...excellent.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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Listening to every heart


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Because you already knew
the passion you would hold
as a writer...that's why...
he just didn't know they were
tears of joy...
Madame Chipmunk
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5 posted 08-20-2002 09:36 PM       View Profile for Madame Chipmunk   Email Madame Chipmunk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Madame Chipmunk's Home Page   View IP for Madame Chipmunk

Tears of joy and tears of passion...
this is such a lovely poem of memories near and far...
~ hugs and memories

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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GreenEyes~

'I flowered, a rose in the rain
you are a spirit, I still hear
  "do not cry,  everything will be alright"

remind me I am the echo

fragile time

standing'


Everything you write is tenderly beautiful ...
this is no exception ... but it is exceptional~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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7 posted 08-21-2002 06:36 AM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Lauren each piece that you write is so exquisite and lovely but hon I can feel your pain and your joy all wrapped up in this one.  Hugs to you doll.  

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

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8 posted 08-21-2002 08:22 AM       View Profile for Neeraja   Email Neeraja   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Neeraja

B E A U T I F U L !!!!

I enjoyed this poem so much... with tears in my eyes...

Neeraja
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9 posted 08-21-2002 08:40 AM       View Profile for Chanson   Email Chanson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chanson

Such lovely musings, Lauren. So much so I must thank YOU for sharing them. Simply beautiful. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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10 posted 08-21-2002 08:45 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lauren,
Impressed, a lovely write.
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The heart of you


11 posted 08-21-2002 09:53 AM       View Profile for Moonlight Romeo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moonlight Romeo

You are indeed Echo, the sound made more beautiful.  As are these words.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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12 posted 08-21-2002 10:34 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Wild lilies  amidst seas of grass --
  our spirit  giving oceans blue    skies  
slipping    away  like changing weather

You will sleep many hours here
   trembling from  salt   --
your wounds  know   pain
building faith in a
ruined house  

touching fire and water
  ashes under my feet
footprints    fragile



{years have gone by}

I split your image --
how beautiful you were
my first encounter
          of times pictures

I wept for you
   I held   what remained
I felt    loss  and pain
come forth again    I learned
to let go   long before I loved



I flowered, a rose in the rain
you are a spirit, I still hear
  "do not cry,  everything will be alright"

reminding me I am the echo

fragile time

standing

================================


God this is beautiful...
so many delicate layers of searching and discovery....so many pieces of you wrapped in exquisite bittersweet images...
Not only are you an echo ...but me thinks you are also a beacon of light and you all will now find your way home to one another.

If all the tear drops went to heaven
And if all the pain was confined ...
Would I be your salvation
could I make your spirit shine.

KWSB

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just out of reach


13 posted 08-21-2002 11:31 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Lauren this is simply lovely!! Bound for my library. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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14 posted 08-21-2002 04:47 PM       View Profile for JAR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JAR

LittleL'


Standing
you are
strong
at that.


J'
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I feel such longing and loneliness in this, Lauren.  Beautifully expressed, my friend. *hugs*
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Greeneyes - another masterpiece from you...

BC
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beautiful.....Library
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Exquisite writing...
Hugs2uPoetFriendGreeneyes...
*~coco~*
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starting to stretch a bit, i feel.
quote:
your wounds  know   pain
building faith in a
ruined house  

my favorite gems here.

hugs
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