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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas 
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I feel as Mr. Shakespeare's hand That never held a quill Or as the bravest knight may have Without his sword or shield In perfect love where once we were My soul you could replete With you and love, both distant now I'm simply incomplete A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You DO draw the emotion in so few lines, Kris... and you do it very well... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
And I the maid without her knight as incomplete as thee. Sandra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Amen, Kris... Karilea said it perfectly and you wrote it perfectly.  ~ hugs from the underground burrowLyra |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
beautiful..... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Kristopher, this is so beautiful but so sad, I hope this is only fictional and now like Shakespeare loves robin always restores amends in your heart! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristopher, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
How I missed this the first time through I don't know. It's lovely Kris. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"With you & love, both distant now, I'm simply incomplete." I'm glad these lines were at the end of the poem, instead of the beginning. They moved me to tears and I wouldn't have been able to read the rest of the poem! Take care Linda |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Beautiful. Simply beautiful. The extra stanza works wonderful here, Kris. By the way, replete? Nice word choice.  Sincerely, Titus "I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come." |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Titus, I'd like to give thanks to my thesaurus for that word!!  )Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
Great like all said... Secretlife, (Easy come,,Easy go) |
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